OBGYN About story: I conceived OBGYN as a hot story for all who enjoy both casual free use and impregnation/breeding kink. Pregnancy will usually be a feature and birth will appear less often. Chapters that introduce that content into a branch will be labeled as such. I have completed one branch to give Eric a wholesome ending. I will be adding some more extreme branches in the future. Requesting Feedback: If you're interested in free-use breeding, please read as much of it as you like and let me know: Did you stop reading before the branch terminated? If you did, why? Did anything turn you off? If so, what do you think would make it hotter? Do you think any of the characters behave inconsistently with their past actions? If you have any other comments or suggestions, I'd love to hear them.
It's a good start. You basically just have two parallel linear paths at this point. If I had a criticism, it's that I'm not sure you've established the basics of the setting - it's science fiction, but there's no real explanation for what the limits of the technology are or why regular ol' fucking (which apparently results in near-instantaneous pregnancy, somehow; even if users can ovulate at will you'd expect insemination and conception to take some period of time) is preferable over, say, artificial insemination. So I like the RAD as a basic concept, but I'm not sure you've really explored the possibilities of the technology, or why it is necessary. As far as recommendations go, I wouldn't mind seeing the sex scenes spiced up a bit. I know writing about humping & pumping can get tedious, but some of the charm of impregnation is lost when ovulation is a push of a button away - it feels like there should be some challenge (maybe to increase chances of conception the female needs to orgasm?), or at least a bit more detail. Have a little more fun with it, describe how they get worked up, etc. Add in some foreplay, oral sex, anal stimulation, nipple twists, for a bit of variety. Plotwise, I'm not sure where you go from here. I think you have the potential for some good branches off your current paths - but I also think you might need to add in some twist aside from "Guy impregnates this girl automatically, then meets another girl and impregnates her automatically, rinse repeat." After so many cum-soaked pages it'll eventually get tiresome. There needs to be some added wrinkle or complication - maybe a goal.
Thanks for reading, Zeebop! Your criticism will help me make choices while writing the next branch and explaining the science. When you put it that way, I have to agree that some amount of breeding kink is lost when pregnancy is as easy to achieve/predict as I've made it in Fort OBGYN. For many people, part of the appeal of breeding is that it takes time, effort, and overcoming probability: I read somewhere that a random creampie has about 1% chance of making a baby. There’s a feeling of accomplishment that comes with beating those odds. I will think about what benefits come from getting rid of uncertainty in the act and how to exploit those, so the loss isn’t wasted. It's possible that some Breeders also mourn the loss of challenge. They can take steps to enjoy more uncertainty in what they do, even though a choice like that would make their jobs more difficult.
