I recently started a RPG-style story called Succession To The Throne. I am not a native speaker and not sure about grammatical errors and inappropriate phrases. For this reason I'm searching for an editor. So, if you like the concept of the story and would like to help me with the language, I would be happy, if you would contact me. Please leave me a short feedback, if you dislike/like the concept. Thanks gene.sis
It's a good story, but I dislike the idea that you take on the role of a scheming and conniving minx. I personally would rather the princess embark on a bloody-handed mission of conquest to create her own kingdom to rule.
Thanks for your feedback. Well, I think it would be impossible for an inexperienced, spoiled princess girl and a young varlet to build their own kingdom just with the power of swords. In her situation, she could commit fratricide but that wouldn't make her queen as there are many other males in the succession.
Yes, an inexperienced and spoiled princess: nothing says she has to stay that way... http://valdemar.wikia.com/wiki/Idra
That's correct. Though it would need some time to get there. I think that there are many reasons why her first plan fails, so that could be a nice option if she reaches a point where it would be impossible to become the heir of her father's throne. Besides, the varlet could/should have a main role in her story... Unfortunately, the story is currently on hiatus as I would like to have more option of processing game mode variables.
Funny, I've got like 5 or six stories that I've got nothing but the first chapter because I'm waiting for the formula parser to be able to do them RIGHT...
