The awakening of a warlock

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by benzor, Jan 21, 2016.

  1. benzor

    benzor Virgin

    I'm currently working on my story The awakening of a warlock which is about a young man who gains magical powers as successor of a warlock. At the moment it is what most of us probably would do, cause some mischief. My long term plan is to add some opponents for him.

    English is not my first language, therefor I rely a bit on LanguageTools grammar check. I hope that the issues are not that big that my story isn't entertaining.

    I hope for feedback and/or suggestions.
     
  2. Nemo of Utopia

    Nemo of Utopia CHYOA Guru

    Yet another generic mind control story...