The Celeb Handler Feedback

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Spermlord, Jul 21, 2018.

  1. Spermlord

    Spermlord Virgin

    So what do you guys think of the different story so far. I know that i'm not really the best at writing in english. Have a hard time with the grammar (being french as first language). I would love to have someone to look at my chapter and correct the grammar in them. Any, would love to know your thoughts!
     
  2. HaremStarter

    HaremStarter Really Experienced CHYOA Backer

    Link to story please.
     
  3. Spermlord

    Spermlord Virgin

  4. Loeman

    Loeman Really Really Experienced

    I don't usually play editor, but because you've gotten a fair number of likes for your intro and because you used the forums and because I feel like it, I'll message you an edited version of your intro if you care to use it.

    First impressions are important.
     
  5. wicker

    wicker Really Really Experienced

    as you know, I've added a few to your story. I like the idea.
    I like the idea that some celebs just accept their new fetishes and lives, but some would be have no control and not be able to say no even though they want to, so you may want to have some threads for both, but that's just me.
     
  6. Spermlord

    Spermlord Virgin

    I'll sure use it, and make the change when i have time for it.
     
  7. Spermlord

    Spermlord Virgin

    Love your chapters! Keep doing with them, I didn't make different thread for acceptance or not, it's just goes with the moment and feeling so far, tho nothing is set in stone and i could make different thread with it at some point. I miss the time to write but, i have so many different ideas for branching story of chapter I already wrote.