Hi everyone, I started a new story called The Magic Wand https://chyoa.com/story/The-Magic-Wand.21860 which is about two guys who get into possession of a magic wand which they use to change/affect people around them. It isn't the most original idea but I would love to hear some feedback on it in general, on what is written already and maybe some ideas/thoughts where to take the story, what aspects are more popular and which not. Thanks in advance. Pingu
It's a reasonable premise, and the pictures are a nice touch. Pretty short, and you haven't really explored any of the limits on the wand's power yet. While magic is fun as a way to suspend disbelief and do lots of crazy things, if you enforce some kind of limitation it forces the characters (and therefore you) to get a little creative in how they can use the wand to achieve their goals (which may or may not include getting laid, getting that one girl they're in love with, etc.) One or two little typos I noticed like: Of course, there being two of them, there's a real possibility that they might fight over the wand...or use it on each other. They could change each other and then break the wand, causing both of them to be trapped, too.
Thanks for the feedback..... Those things, especially the limits went through my head also already and I want to explore those at some point, while at the mome t having more like overall fun.... General question.... I ws thinking of adding a celeb branch, not to take over the story but to include some of my fav Celebs.... What do people think about it....
