I guess it's a bit late, but uh, here's the thread https://chyoa.com/story/The-Royal-Succession.12631
There's a sizable amount of content, and the writing is a decent mix of plot development and boning. Chapter development is uneven; I get the impression that you (and your fellow contributors) get the idea for a storyline and pursue it, then get bored or lose interest after a while, leading to a lot of dead ends, or re-tracing back to branching paths...nothing uncommon there, most of the stories on the site do that sort of thing. I do get the impression that you're not entirely sure what to do after the moment of impregnation - when you even get that far. I think there's still a lot of potential left in the storyline and the characters. If I had one criticism on the writing, it's that the dialogue is very compressed. When you look at a recent chapter: https://chyoa.com/chapter/Stop-at-a-familiar-convent-(Cecily).423400 A typical paragraph reads: Now imagine if this was decompressed: Same content, just different distribution: this changes the pace, breaks the dialogue down into smaller chunks for easier reading, easier to tell who is speaking.
