https://chyoa.com/story/The-"Willing-Dolls"-club.35428 Basically it's a story where I would write about bdsm (not quite) & female masochist fetishes, and it contains moderate violence and submissive women. I have created four characters so far (one imcomplete) but I am really out of ideas to create new ones. It's a small story, but if you'd like to provide some valuable feedback, I'll appreciate it!
You might want to fix your link there. The writing and dialogue are overall solid. The plot is fairly linear at the moment, and maybe a touch hentai-influenced in some of the dialogue. You haven't set up most of the stories for any possible branching - that is, you don't always have a question to lead into the next chapter. If you're looking for ways to expand your story, it might be interesting if some of the "dolls" got to interact with each other more, to get a bit more of the psychology behind the "willing dolls" or the folks running the club; or maybe some special event where the women are forced to compete against one another or face some penalty (like getting thrown out).
Thank you for your advice! Actually interactions between the characters and club owner’s own story are very good ideas! And yes, I am a huge weeb story is heavily inspired by some of the hentai I’ve been watching.
