Hey everybody. The story is here if you'd like to see that first: Three Wishes I started writing because my wife loves mind control stories, & we have both definitely enjoyed the site. Having said that, I've found that it's a lot easier for me to write the branching backstory bits setting up the sex scenes than the sexy bits themselves. I'd love to hear any recommendations for other stories with short, quality sex scenes, especially those that set up forking paths well. Also, if anybody wants to play with this setting & these characters, please please please feel free to add your own chapters! You would definitely make at least two people very happy. Thank you!
Sex scenes are quite technically demanding, in that a good sex scene should have a good amount of physical detail - sensuous and vivid physical descriptions, an attention to body mechanics, appearance, and any toys or restraints used. *And* there might be, depending on the writing style, a good amount of mental and emotional detail interwoven into that mix, accompanying and shifting along with and alongside those physical interactions - both driven by and driving forward physical interaction. *And* there might be multiple partners and players, each with their own styles, feelings, motivations, and limbs and boobs and dicks to mind. *And* there's decisions on dialogue and noises to be made, how much and what kind. Add that to good storytelling, like an occasional accident or surprise or misunderstanding or reader misdirection (or none of that - having good storytelling being the point)... And, yeah, I think a strong erotic scene can be as challenging an "action"-type scene to write as any kind of action scene out there, bar none. I have a number that I'm proud of in my own writing. But they aren't necessarily short and aren't necessarily branching.
Definitely something a little tricky, and I'm definitely not an expert on it...but a possible approach is to ask a few questions: 1) Who are the basic players? (i.e. who is in the scene) 2) Where does it take place? (is there a bed? A chair? Cold tile on the floor? Dirty toilet?) 3) What are the positions? (This can get tricky - and research is fun!) 4) How do the players move into and between the positions, as well as any intervening obstacles? (clothes, ropes, blindfolds, condoms, dinner on the table, etc.) Once you have that down, you can basically outline the scene. A lot of mind-control stuff, there's going to be a dominant partner giving instructions and one or more submissive partners. It's an interesting dynamic to work with, especially if the submissive partner starts to take initiative. As far as the actual writing goes...individual style counts for a lot, but basic mechanical actions are only the bare limits. Remember that there are lots of different senses - not just hearing, taste, smell, and touch, but also inner perceptions of what is going on in the body, heat and friction, pressure and pain - and lots of secondary arousal signals. Erect nipples, raised body temperature, release of various sexual secretions...lots of stuff to play around with. And it doesn't always have to be full-fledged Kama Sutra either! Small, realistic scenarios that build up tension slowly are great for mind control, because there's lot of room for dialogue between parties, the slow breakdown of barriers. A naked body is sexier if it starts out fully clothed and is slowly stripped, that kind of thing. Intensity of language works too - you might start out fairly discreet (member, cleft) move to specific (penis, vagina) then get more explicit (dick, pussy) or vulgar (cock, cunt) or creative (wombscraper, bitchhole), etc. There's a different dynamic from characters if you start out saying one thing and use it all the way through versus starting out rather sedate and slowly ramping up the adjectives.
