Ye Olde Ren Faire

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Zekar, Sep 27, 2016.

  1. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    Just published Ye Olde Ren Faire.

    Please post any feedback or comments here.

    It's just started so suggestions and contributions are appreciated as I start writing.

    Current Story Branches
    • Together
      • Gown/Corset Shopping
        • Kat turned into buxom maiden.
          • Sheriff Nisha arrests Rich
            • Escape
          • Cleavage day!
          • Rich turned into Regina
      • Lover's Glade

    Suggestions:
    Finished: "No, Kat is being Odd"

    Finished: "Cleavage Day!"

     
    Last edited: Oct 1, 2016
  2. moonblack

    moonblack CHYOA Guru

    Just finished reading the opening chapters. Nice start that got me curious where the story might go.

    Not much else to say for now.
     
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  3. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced

    Finished and liked what I've read so far(4 chapters to date).Enjoying the slow build-up as I posted and can hardly wait for the main scenario to begin
     
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  4. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    Thank you guys for enjoying it so far. I'm aiming to hammer out some more tomorrow.

    A question I have is should I use photos for the costumes? Finding pictures of Ren Faire garb is easy. The trouble is finding sexy gowns so far.
     
  5. gscmar64

    gscmar64 Really Experienced

    Not a huge fan of photos myself but if you believe it will enhance the storytelling better than descriptive word then go picture crazy!
     
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  6. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    Kat's Sexy Red Gown, Story Branch finished:
    Rich has a plan

    I will be adding dead end chapters to each of the branches with one "Good" ending.

    After this I will be expanding upon the Lover's Glade story arc which will involve transformation into Nymph and Satyr as well as a love spell havok. I don't see this arc lasting as long as te initial one so I may branch out into a Belly Dancer arc.

    Please like and book mark chapters. That tells me that there is interest.

    Also keep requests coming as they really help get my creative juices flowing.

    Any contributions are welcomed as well.
     
  7. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    Shout out to Noah_Peal for pointing out my mistakes in Chapter 1. The names for the main characters have been corrected to match the rest of the story.
     
  8. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    I'm calling out for more contributions.

    I won't be able to add any more chapters till 10/10/16. I will be able to review additional chapters once a day.
     
  9. Zekar

    Zekar Really Experienced

    After an absence I've made this story public. I do not plan to add more.