Here's the discussion thread for my new story "School Field Trip". It's a short story I created to write while I decide some stuff about the other story "The Azure Dungeon". Using the same characters as "Dungeon", but with a few background changes. The pairings for the story are going to be Zack/Victoria, Gavin/Heather, Brandon/Ashley and Chloe/Lisa. The link: https://chyoa.com/story/School-Field-Trip.11167
So, now the story's gaining some speed. The classic Zack/Vicky crush was reversed on this version, I thought it fit better for this considering what I have in mind for the story. We had Heather teasing Gavin and finding it fun, new teachers and new characters, such as Jake and Natalie. What are you guys thinking about the story so far? What do you think or expect that's going to happen?
So far the story looks great, especailly the fact that it's in a shorter time span than At the Cabin and that they are on a school trip; it will make the situations in which they find themselves more interesting, such as trying to have sex without alerting other people. It's also great to see that now Vicky is the one having a crush on Zack, while he has a crush on Natalie; i'm curious to see how the whole thing will play out and how will Zack end up with Vicky. Also, it's great to see that Chloe is a lesbian, this way she can go after a girl (Lisa) and everybody ends up with someone at the end up the story. I am curious to see how will Chloe and Lisa will end up together considering that Lisa is Zack's ex-grilfriend and so far she has been portraid as being straight. And i'm glad to see that Gavin will end up with Heather (if you don't decide to change that). As for what i expect to happen, i imagine that Zack, Victoria and Natalie will for a small "love triangle" for some time, until Zack and Vicky end up together. I think that a possible out come would be for Jake and Natalie to end up together. As for Gavin and Heather i imagine that she will tease him mercilessly and once they get together she might push him to have some exhibitionist sex or at least in a place where they might be seen or heard. Good luck and happy writing.
Thanks! About the shorter time span, it's a new thing for me as well, because for the first time I have the entire story in my head, so nothing has to change, including the pairings. How Lisa will go after Chloe is a funny situation I've got planned, and it will involve Zack. Heather and Gavin also have fun times ahead of them, their arc will mostly run in separate from the others' until the end on the third day. About Jake and Natalie, what I've got planned for them might seem a bit heavy when I publish the chapters, but it will help move the story along, I've given a few hints in the three chapters I already published. I have high expectations for the Zack/Vicky storyline as well, he will have a few nice adventures before he realizes what she means to him, and she will start to consider if it's worth to wait for him as temptations come knocking on her door.
I'll be doing a quest branch on story as well. Starting next week, I won't have too much time in my hands to develop it like a regular story.
Hey there, I am happy to hear that you will keep developing the story, but i am also a bit dissapointed that it will become a quest, because i was really hoping to see Gavin in a relationship with Heather; i know that it's still possible for them to end up together, but i also know that people are shipping Zack and Heather pretty much. I also understand that your new position at work will not allow you a lot of time to write. Good luck and happy writing.
Quest stories are ideal for me to finish those two stories I have left. In a regular story, at least the way I do it, there's too much planning to be done and I prefer to post long chapters, and I won't have time for that. With the quest stories, the planning is pretty much done by the choices, and I can post shorter chapters to leave open ended scenes and plenty of choices to the voters.
