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Nemo of Utopia

Nemo of Utopia

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This is a very dark idea that I'm not sure if I'm up to writing, or even have the right too, or in fact, if it's permitted...

Five women from the same city are raped while on vacation in various places. They meet at a local support group. They each discover somehow that the others, like themselves: achieved vengeance against their rapist.

It brings them no satisfaction: each for her own reasons knows that they're the lucky ones, the men who destroyed their sense of safety got what was coming to them, but there's a thousand more just like them walking around free.

They become friends: and decide that since they can never be at peace knowing what these monsters are capable of: the only thing they can do with the rest of their lives is work together to put as many of those monsters in the ground as they can before someone manages to stop them...

So is born BRAVE: a secret society of rape survivors dedicated to eradicating the genes that permit men to commit rape from the human gene pool: by murdering anyone in whom they are active...
 
Yeah, dark.

Separate the (deadly, dark toned) violence from the sex and you might be within the rules. The rules are, to my understanding, mostly about slasher porn and snuff porn. You can get away with quite a lot of sex and brutality, and a lot more if you take the sex out.

Never thought I'd have that discussion with you, though...
 
Well, you don't really know me, do you? (Any more than I know you...)

But honestly, why does it surprise you that I, who rail constantly against the prevalence of non-consent on this site: should have an idea such as this? To put a full and complete stop to this abomination against all that is pure and holy: whatever the cost?

You don't know me Loeman.

If your IRL proclivities match your writing style: pray you never do.
 
Preference aside, you know you can extend the N sound without stuttering or mouth gymnastics.
 
Stuttering, no: Mouth Gymnastics, yes. I CAN extend the N, if I concentrate hard enough, but not easily and not well. I have no idea why it's just something I find very hard to do.
 
Huh.

Well, therein lies the difference.

See? We can clear all these misunderstandings up.
 
Fully aware this is a tangent, but:

Nemo of Utopia said:
You can't extend an N sound like that, it's a consonant.
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N is what's called a Nasal Consonant, which means part of the sound is generated by blocking air from escaping through the mouth and instead forcing it out the nose. If you focus, even without attempting to elongate the N sound, you can feel your nose vibrating for the first half of the sound. Drawing out the N sound is as simple as holding on to this half of the sound. After that point, once the vibration subsides, its sound is similar to a Stop Consonant, which absolutely cannot be drawn out. Really, a drawn out N isn't much different than humming, and the only consonants that absolutely cannot be extended are the Stop Consonants. In the word "stop" alone, we draw out the word by extending the Fricative S or Vowel O, but not the T or P which are both Stop Consonants.

Back on topic:

Loeman said:
Separate the (deadly, dark toned) violence from the sex and you might be within the rules. The rules are, to my understanding, mostly about slasher porn and snuff porn. You can get away with quite a lot of sex and brutality, and a lot more if you take the sex out.
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It's actually the exact opposite: you can accomplish more by including it as part of the sex. The only catch is the victim has to enjoy it at some point and have the pleasure they derive overshadow the pain. Basically: we welcome Stockholm Syndrome, Kuklinski, and possibly Gerald and Charlene (if they keep their hands off the kids), but have to turn away Jack the Ripper and Kamisaku Jo.

The question is more to Nemo's idea on how this plays out. If Nemo wants to be like Sicks was with Andrew and deny death until merriment is uttered, then feel free to draw from as high as the Cenobites. Otherwise...well, I already mentioned Kuklinski, so let's pile on Shipman and Putin: quick attacks, maximum efficiency, and rock-solid alibis. Some gory and graphic moments in Kuklinski's early work, but even those should pass a CHYOA test. We might be able to get away with Haigh and Christie, but even making the victims 14 years older still leaves Miyazaki barred. I'll set that as the range for the moment and leave you guys to further inquire and search this yourself (since I probably shouldn't post all of the graphic details of serial killers on an erotic story forum).

And yes, I'm that guy.
 
I'm not sure i'm getting the 'sex' part of this story concept.
Seeing it comes from Nemo, i can hardly imagine it would linger on the victims assault.
Also i'm inclined to belive he doesn't want to focus on retribuitory snuff sex with the rapist (right o_O?)

So my question is, where is the sex?
 
We have a Non-Erotic category for a reason.

However, that wasn't where I was going to go with this.

The sexual component would enter into it between 'missions', with various members of BRAVE either seeking comfort with each other or turning the metaphorically already razor-edged shards of their hearts into yet another weapon to hunt their prey. Get close to a suspected pimp, convince him that you are already a broken vessel lure him with loyalty and sex, then one night, he comes to collect... and you're not where you said you would be: but your sisters, guns ready... ARE.

Sic Semper Raptores.
 
Nemo of Utopia said:
We have a Non-Erotic category for a reason.
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I'm sorry if it came out rude, i was in a hurry. I honestly failed to see what was sexy part, given your first description.
Writing a Non-Erotic story is perfectly fine, but somehow it's not the first thing that comes to my mind while reading this forum.
 
Nemo of Utopia said:
And what, EXACTLY do you mean by that? (o_O)
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I meant I'm the guy who knows torture, rape, and murder to the point I creep the fuck out of everyone who chooses to venture down that rabbit hole. Case and point:

Nemo of Utopia said:
turning the metaphorically already razor-edged shards of their hearts into yet another weapon to hunt their prey. Get close to a suspected pimp, convince him that you are already a broken vessel lure him with loyalty and sex, then one night, he comes to collect... and you're not where you said you would be: but your sisters, guns ready... ARE.
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All I can picture after reading that is Charlene leading the girls to the van between images of back-alley abortions in the name of both secrecy and mission. This is also a moment where Kuklinski's methods would come in handy to nullify the need for the latter. Although, there is something to be said about growth, so if that's factored in it could be good for the start until they figure out guns are loud and sloppy crime scenes are evidence mother-loads.

More critically, that sounds like it would get very repetitive very quickly.
 
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