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I like it, you're a good writer. If I had a complaint the primary path looks like it's going to progress a little fast for my taste. I could be in the minority, but by the second chapter she's already fantasizing about sex with someone else, so I get the feeling that it's not going to feel as much like a "descent" as I expected from the title. Also, I'd recommend getting another path going soon just in general, because it kind of bothers me when a story on this site is completely linear like that. Just my opinion though.

 

Out of curiosity, what sort of variables are you thinking of?

 

It is possible to activate Conditional Branches ("Chapters can have conditions") after publishing the story if that is what you want to do.
You can find the "Edit Story" link at "My Stories" (click on the ellipses beside the story). This link should also work for your story.

 

I'd say those are good variables.

 

hello there, why do you deleted the story? i liked it a lot and i was playing it. now i cannot play it again. can you upload it again? thanks for the story btw great potential

 

The author got their account deleted. (There are some reasons in life which can make that necessary for some authors.)

 

well fuck guess i loss a good story since i left it at the middle