High School Hell Power and character developement

Marlikton

Marlikton

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On my Story "High School Hell" I'm thinking on what powers the main character is going to obtain. Right now the one my imagination seems to be set on is a and the best I can all it is Shadow Man. His entire being is dark except for his face and it appears to others that his body is being blown away like it is caught in a breeze although there is none and no matter where his body is he can hop from one place to another as long as there is a shadow or darkness big enough for his body to jump or walk out of although all he needs to trip someone up is just enough shade for his hand to grab an ankle. The character spent his life like a wall flower never really standing out so you could say he has always lived in the shadows of others. I also thought up that he'd be able to see or hear things from corrupted shadows. He'd be able to give certain shadows life maybe even let his own shadow or shadows depending on how many light sources he had travel and ease drop. Anyway I am open to other ideas just let me know what you think. Aiming too high or too complex?
 
depends on how much he can interact with others as a shadow. You said he can grab an ankle, but how much more?
 
wicker said:
depends on how much he can interact with others as a shadow. You said he can grab an ankle, but how much more?
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A friend also brought that up. I was thinking as long as a shadow covers it he can touch it. For example he could finger fuck a character while being on the other side of the building. I was thinking of letting his power grow every time he gave Lilith a child, if he wants more power he has to give her what she wants more children who reach adulthood as fast as Lilith wishes as long as they are of her flesh and blood.
 
He could literally pop his head out of a wall and have a chat with someone or go down on a woman, tease her clit,feel her up and while obviously they can feel it but since no one is close enough to touch them they think it's all in there head but eventually and usually when they are alone he can control there body, hold them in place, pose them, make them touch him physically while he can't control what they'll say out loud as long as his personal shadow crosses his targets shadow he can make them his puppet.
 
I was also thinking that he could solidify a shadow he would become a living ghost giving his body to give another shadow controlled by him now form. A shadow doppelganger basically. While in this form he can touch,taste,feel and control everything the doppelganger does and says. While in this form the person whose shadow has become possessed basically also feels everything there shadow does. They could watch or even not watch there doppelganger masterbate and could feel every minute of it without being in the same room and when the main character gets strong enough to solidify a shadow without giving up his body he can have sex with the doppelganger and the other person feels every minute of it. When the stimulation is continuous the real person can at times see what is happening but to them it's a fantasy cause they see themselves not the possessed shadow having sex with the character.
 
I have also thought up that his shadow can manipulate things around him but I don't want my character to be a all powerful shadow manipulator somethings he will need to take his Shadow man form to do certain things and that leaves him open to discovery and even manipulation besides Marcuse and Lilith. I want this character to explore his dark side give in to his more deviant and at times sadistic side. This is his revenge and while he will not physically harm the women he is after he will go after them mentally and exploit any weakness he finds.
 
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could be fun. A woman sitting at a table or desk where her lap and lower body are in shadow would be a fun target.
 
I should of said this from the start but except for the demons and powers etc this really happened to me and I never got the revenge I wanted I didn't see the people in general again cause my mom sent me away after 6 months of rehab getting my legs to work again. I could of gone the fiction way but I have never been much of a fiction writer so I added fantasy aspects to it. I'm tired of carrying this around with me so I am gonna write this story and finally let the past and this chip on my shoulder go.
 
That's true and thanks Nemo unfortunately the way my mind works every time I get close to a woman that history pops back up and long story short usually screw things up from lack of trusting someone else. Been working on it for years made a huge step earlier in the year but with this story I am hoping to bury it for good and just move on.
 
When I start talking about my personal life I seem to get what my mom calls "motor mouth" so if I am saying too much here or in messages just send me a line saying dude motor mouth or something like that.
 
I don't know if I read that correctly but I really like the idea if him being able to communicate with the girls shadow. Seems a clever idea that everyone walks around with a shadow version of themselves who hears and sees everything they do but can't communicate back.

Don't know that it turns me on personally but I think as a writing plot.

Also since you're on here Malikton, I just wanted you to know I legit laughed out loud on FTPD story -

"Mirror Mirror on the Wall, Open up before you piss me off!"
 
StanS55 said:
I don't know if I read that correctly but I really like the idea if him being able to communicate with the girls shadow. Seems a clever idea that everyone walks around with a shadow version of themselves who hears and sees everything they do but can't communicate back.

Don't know that it turns me on personally but I think as a writing plot.

Also since you're on here Malikton, I just wanted you to know I legit laughed out loud on FTPD story -

"Mirror Mirror on the Wall, Open up before you piss me off!"
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You mean the shadow doppelganger you did read it a bit wrong however your idea actually works better than my original one cause I've been trying to work it in my head and it just didn't seem to really fit. But If he can communicate with the shadows of his targets he could easily learn everything he needs to gain an edge.
 
I was hoping someone would add chapters to that story cause I just seemed to become more focused on High School Hell than FTPD however with all the current free time I have now unlike back when I first started the story maybe I could continue where I left off. I haven't done many sex scenes but I could give it a whirl for old times sake. Since it was my first story.
 
Marlikton said:
You mean the shadow doppelganger you did read it a bit wrong however your idea actually works better than my original one cause I've been trying to work it in my head and it just didn't seem to really fit. But If he can communicate with the shadows of his targets he could easily learn everything he needs to gain an edge.
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Yea exactly, I imagine they have a lot to gripe about. Would know their fantasies and mistakes.

You may not want to do this in your story but I find in my stories that having some plot specific reason they shouldn't have sex gives story more interest, tension, and payoff when they inevitably do. For me, I usually use the somewhat played out Sister/Daughter tension but brainstorming outloud here for the shadow:
- Light like you said, in sure some way to work that in interesting ways
- Maybe if they see him, he loses his powers or abilities so its creeping, or sleep seduction or putting them in a walking dream state
- You mentioned Highschool, maybe it's against the rules to use his powers for seduction and some hell bent Dean hunts and tries to catch him breaking the rules

Sorry if I'm taking this in totally left field direction but that's just some thoughts shared
 
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