Monster Hunter

[SilverSpectre006]

Monster Hunter is a fantasy story about a monster hunter exploring a world full of monsters, girls, and monster girls.

https://chyoa.com/story/Monster-Hunter.21210

I’ve posted a few new chapters to my story so far, aside from criticism on the writing style and any grammatical errors I would appreciate an opinion on what the title image should be? In you own view of course, I get the feeling perhaps the image isn’t catching much attention and getting people to read the story, that or I’d have to resign to my story just being boring I suppose XD

Hopefully it is the former and not the latter. But yes, a few comments would be most appreciated. Just any comment would be GREATLY appreciated XD thanks.

 

[Nemo of Utopia]

My thoughts on the cover image are as follows: you need something more sexual. The present cover is fine, but not for a sexual relationship story on a sexual situations website. Also, your writing, from what I read, could use a bit more descriptive details and callback references to those details, once they are established. (I only really read part of the 4th of July special and the introduction...)

Speaking of the introduction chapter: you don't really grab the readers attention right out of the gate.

What kind of world is this? Why are there Monsters? Why are there Monster Hunters? Who decides which 'monsters' get hunted down and which can live in peace? These and other questions should be answered or at least hinted at in your introduction.

Hope this helps!

~N.o.U.

 

[SilverSpectre006]

My thoughts on the cover image are as follows: you need something more sexual. The present cover is fine, but not for a sexual relationship story on a sexual situations website. Also, your writing, from what I read, could use a bit more descriptive details and callback references to those details, once they are established. (I only really read part of the 4th of July special and the introduction...)

Speaking of the introduction chapter: you don't really grab the readers attention right out of the gate.

What kind of world is this? Why are there Monsters? Why are there Monster Hunters? Who decides which 'monsters' get hunted down and which can live in peace? These and other questions should be answered or at least hinted at in your introduction.

Hope this helps!

~N.o.U.

Oh, I didn't notice someone replied back to this old thread. Much appreciated
I could always use improvement on my writing, fully agree with that. Need to he a tad bit more descriptive eh? Noted Haha.

As for the introduction, yes I do need to improve that. Funny thing though is, I did go for detail on how and why the monsters are there, but them got criticized for going too far in detail for a simple porn story XD but you're right I should go for something regardless. Thanks for the kind words of advice :^)