Here Comes The Bride

Hey All,

Been enjoying writing this one so far just interested to see what others think... haven't gotten much feedback so just curious how I am doing. New to this whole bit.
https://chyoa.com/story/Here-Comes-The-Bride.20477

 

Have you ever thought of adding a supernatural element to the story?

 

Thanks for the response. I haven't but I'm certainly open to the idea, did you have something specific in mind?

 

yeah i did,what would you say to adding an incubus and succubus to the story?

 

I'm not really familiar with the 2 other then a succubus is female correct? Like spirits that fuck them in their sleep, right?

 

well,demons who come to Earth from Hell to claim the souls of those they deem worthy of becoming fellow demons like themselves,and they usually extract the souls from thier victims through sex

 

So these demons seeing how snobby and bitchy this bride has been the last few weeks of her wedding planning leading up to the day of decide to teach this bride'zilla some poetic justice by spoiling her big day and dragging her soul to hell to serve as their sex slave for all eternity? is that what your proposing?
https://live.staticflickr.com/65535/48431387957_e9c103d809_b.jpg

 

i like that idea and then the bride can turn the husband into an incubus,and then they can do likewise to all the guests at the wedding before spreading throughout the city to turn its entire population into demons

 

maybe she gets taken in a scenario similar to this

 

interesting way of doing it,but i envisioned when someone needs to die and turn into an incubus or succubus,they orgasm thier soul into thier maker's body before thier eternal sexual gifts begin to manifest themselves

 

Sort of like possession through sex? What happens to the soul of the original "host" who becomes the succubus?

 

It goes to Hell where a jade crystal penis or pussy awaits the soul to fuck it for eternity

 

Also,the dying/transforming victim screams something out as they’re about to orgasm their soul into their makers body

 

Mate, you got this down. Why not add it to the story yourself for us all to enjoy!

 

Because I have the talent to come up with the outlines but not the talent to flesh everything out