Opening paragraph?
This story could be a good example to demonstrate Chyoa - both features and content, with hot writing and good editing.
Thank you! It's nice to see one of the early stories active again.
Personally I would feel free to re-edit after the fact if it's my chapter in my story. I'd be more careful if others have followed with the...
I worked one of Morgan Woodbine's paths (after transferring to Leontes) to an [END]. She gets some satisfaction in helping Leontes' Warden wreak...
Home canning means you can do it all within your household budget, even as government benefits are cut back. Strawberry jam -- it's a dessert...
Instead of the current notifications: "so-and-so just bookmarked your chapter Introduction" "so-and-so just added a comment to the chapter...
Once upon a time a narrative unit was called a "thread". Now it's a "chapter", which I think is a little better. "Page", in some way, harks back...
Veiled belly dancer with heavy eye make-up?
Some extra line breaks in the middle of the dialogue in the first chapter?
Sounds promising. The focus on groups forming and going to the academy to be trained may be an interesting twist. Perhaps there's an audition or...
A link to your author page: https://chyoa.com/user/Genericc616
I'm likely to write a chapter following a reader's suggestion if it flows from the characters and scenes so far. Maybe a sequence if there's...
Separate names with a comma.
