These are very good for making back-and-forth dialogues flow, but I think the tricky part is when both Marcus and Samuel are mentioned in a...
There were tears in Nami’s eyes again – but tears of relief this time. She smiled apologetically, and let herself relax while her new friend...
Nami took a couple of deep breaths to steady herself, feeling that warm, maternal touch for just a little longer. This woman must have seen so...
Thank you both, this is great! I'm so happy that you like it! Any feedback at all is very helpful, at least I know I'm getting something right!...
The Valley of Mists now has an ending. I’d love to get any kind of feedback on how I’m doing, especially on what is better or worse about it...
Floating in that oasis of warm acceptance, Nami felt some of the tension gradually ease from her – the pain not gone, but bearable for now. She...
Nami gave a slight gasp at being touched – thoughts racing before simple instinct took over. She sank into the older woman’s embrace, her body...
Nami felt a tremor of panic go through her as the energy that had been driving her onward started to finally ebb. Without a task in front of her,...
The infection was exactly what Nami had been afraid of. With great care, she did what she could for the surface injuries, cleaned the woman up as...
Looking around, Nami nodded to Sau. “I’ll take care of her,” she said. “Let me know if you find anyone else who’s in bad shape. And if you see...
Relieved to find that the woman was alive, Nami got out her mediscanner to check her condition. She tried to ignore the smell, overpowering as it...
Nami’s eyes widened at the sight that awaited her – but this was what she was trained for. All other thoughts were pushed out of her head in this...
A chill ran through Nami as she realised what would have happened if she’d drawn the blaster on Thassco by herself. Had he planned it that way –...
Nami’s head was swimming too much for her to think much about what the figures meant. Perhaps later, Thassco’s records would come in useful. For...
A sob convulsed Nami’s body as she found the credit chip. The bitter irony that even if she did survive today, she would still be scrabbling to...
Nami nodded, shivering. Whatever else happened, the doors here wouldn’t simply open themselves. She wanted to ask Sau to look for the card, but no...
Nami stared for a moment, trying to process what she was hearing. “It was j-just him?” she whispered, scarcely daring to believe it. “Nobody else...
“I’m really sorry,” Nami said, “but we’re not safe yet. None of this ship’s crew seem to be aboard right now, but they’ll come back sooner or...
In her fragile state, the laughter cut Nami like a knife. But she couldn’t blame the other woman – whoever she was. The rest of the slaves would...
Horror and grief froze Nami where she sat. The blaster clattered to the floor, her hands shaking too much to hold it. The heat of anger was gone...
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