Okay, I looked at the Bimbo Virus. Couple more typos are evident, most especially on the first page in the title ("decency"). I like the overall...
I haven't gotten to your other story yet.
Nothing wrong with latex. Used it a few times myself. The introductory chapter is where you provide the "hook" to draw readers into the story....
Not super familiar with RWBY, so this will be more about the writing. It's very linear, which isn't bad for a story starting out, just remember...
Chapter length is good, writing is decent, you've got reasonable decision-point questions at the end of each chapter so that you could branch if...
Lot of likes & bookmarks lately - which is a good thing! But it means it's hard to make headway as the chapters hit thresholds faster than I can...
I like transformations, just for the challenge. It ends up a great deal like sex scenes, in that you want the reader to be really invested in the...
I've put a fair bit of work into the story at this point. It's not the best thing I've ever written, and all of it's been written fairly quickly,...
Just running some numbers. Here's the current chapter count: Chapter #: # of chapters (# of chapters left to be written) 1: 1 (0) 2: 2 (0) 3: 4...
Not a bad start! There are two issues I think you might consider: 1) With second person, a lot of the inner life of the characters has to be...
Chapters written: 2,117 Chapters to be written (green): 0 Chapters to be written (orange): 148 Chapter 20 endings: 124 Highest orange chapter: 11...
While I do like CHYOA to branch, I wouldn't consider it an absolute requirement. Maybe a separate category or tag for essentially linear narratives?
You've put a lot of work into it! I haven't gone through all the content yet, but it's pretty good so far. I like the occasional use of images to...
It's a start! Pseudo-Medieval D&D-type world with MMRPG-style mechanics isn't the worst premise. At this point it seems like you might consider...
General feedback: The writing isn't bad! It's a little dialogue-heavy, and you might try mixing that up a bit - talk about what the characters do...
Part of that functionality is already done with tags. If you look at: https://chyoa.com/tag/f2m you can see all the stories with the f2m tag, and...
Comments are the best - actual feedback, suggestions for how they want the story to go forward, etc. The require more effort than a like or a...
Chapters written: 2,001 Chapters to be written (green): 0 Chapters to be written (orange): 177 Chapter 20 endings: 115 Highest orange chapter: 11*...
My story is a little different from most as I use a specific system for judging which chapters get sequels (and how many). Up to chapter 19, 5...
Chapters written: 1,975 Chapters to be written (green): 0 Chapters to be written (orange): 189 Chapter 20 endings: 108 Highest orange chapter:...
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