Always a good idea to include a link: https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.425028 That said...not much there yet. Three chapters, no decisions...
Much the same comments as the other story apply, only I think the game elements are particularly ill-developed at this time - or maybe I'm just...
There's a sizable amount of content, and the writing is a decent mix of plot development and boning. Chapter development is uneven; I get the...
Okay, reply back from one of the admins: So...I write around it, when I get to that. Such is life.
I sent a message to one of the admins. See what they say.
Fair enough. I'll write around it. How do we feel about robots?
Facehuggers are kind of ovipositors on legs, which is where it gets weird. They're definitely sexually mature (the whole point of the facehugger...
Random shower thought occurred to me...in one of the latest chapters of Lois Lane's Night out ( https://chyoa.com/chapter/Xenomorph-Egg.422150 )...
The chapters are of a good length and lots of great detail, your descriptions of action are clear, and I think you're developing themes and plot...
I feel you. Several of my chapters vanish from the front page too fast, don't get any likes. Such is life.
I've got a full time job, this is just a hobby - first time I've tried to write anything erotic, so playing around with things, treating it as a...
There's going to be some risk/impregnation stuff in a couple of the Lois Lane's Night Out paths - chapter Fertility was posted today to give an...
Well, if you haven't read it, Sunstone might give you a few ideas. The big points are generally mutual consent, safety, and trust as you give...
Easiest to see if you look at the story map for Lois Lane's Night Out; I got up to a certain point (chapter 9) in the "main branch", and I've been...
You keep on point, you keep in character. A few quibbles with spelling and grammar, but not enough to fuss about; we all have those. The flow of...
I like that there is at least one long, solid line with a definitive end. I think some of the other options are truncated and undeveloped, but...
Well, it may not have much chapter-depth, but the links help a good bit, and you've got plenty of options. Wrestling isn't my particular interest,...
Fair enough. Different strokes and all that. Forward progress has sort of been stunted by filling out the side-branches, but there's some...
I haven't gone that far, just...dunno, not sure it flows. I don't want to move too fast to get to where I'm headed in some of those stories, but...
I know a great deal of the reading through stories is done through one-handed browsing, and smut-centric chapters are basically the point of the...
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