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Im probably biased, but your story seems pretty cut and dry as far as incest is concerned. Things become a lot more interesting if there are people other than only the main character having sex in the story. Not only does it give you a break, it also fleshes out the characters nicely. (eg a...

Keep things vague (eg hair color, curvy, thinly built) and focus on key details that others might see in them like a character trait or better yet a body part that emulates their character (eg a preppy teen having upturned boobs). I hate it when people list every detail of the characters as if i...

Thinking of maybe writing a story based in the blade runner universe. Honestly, im surprised no one has done it before as we are already given clear examples of replicant being made for the purpose of sex. Luv (a replicant) even mentions it when she is talking to a client in the newer movie...

Lol, i can imagine it would be hard for the patrons to keep it up after that, not to mention the reputation a place like that would have, or complications of a teleporting building. Do you plan on writing this story, or is it just an idea? Not to derail anything but maybe a vampire brothel...

Interesting idea. Do the patrons know they're ghosts? Also sexy and ghosts usually dont mix well, unless sometimes when it involves controlling the actions of the living.

If i see an author's name here, how do i find their stories on chyoa? Is there a search function i cant find?

Sure. Does it have an interesting plot?

I wouldnt mind if people pointed things out for me. Sometimes, I dont know how to work my way around some errors and it takes a bit of input to help see it through. Still, if his posts are any indication, Bam316 needs some serious work on using his punctuation.

Like when I first started, you have random commas where they shouldnt be. Also, don't be afraid to make longer sentences; and for god sakes, use paragraphs! Funny enough, you dramatically improve after the opening chapter, so well done! (I'd redo that first chapter though)

To be the first one as far as i know to finish a story. Also get on the first page of my catagory, currently on fourth.

I see what your saying. I do have outright rejection at 2 points in the story. Early on with the cousin and once depending your choices with your aunt in a sauna later on. I use them to break up the "main character will always get laid no matter what" phenomenon im most stories as well as create...

I think you could do a raped to death scene without crossing the line as long as you arent focused too much on violence or gore. For example orgasms were described as little deaths so maybe if after the orgasm the man or woman passes away that might be seen as acceptable depending on how it was...

I would possibly be interested in helping you out with that story. Thing is I would need a clear outline with a definite ending before i decide to jump in on this.

Care to elaborate on the fantasy creature view? If thats the case that it isnt acceptable then a lot of stories on here are forbidden https://chyoa.com/story/Sifr-the-White-Wolf.4735/map?chapter=134623 https://chyoa.com/story/Progenitor-Rex.15461 https://chyoa.com/story/The-Breeding-Industry.7682

You need less you and your's in that story as it starts sounding more like an aweful transcript of a play than a story set in second person. Also harems are painfully overdone, just saying. They avoid interplay between characters and keeps the story boringly simple, why does a character only...

Thanks, that helps. Still find it a bit odd for non human characters. Like a tentacle monster or a unicorn or a demon dog doesnt pass the harkness test and their ages may very well be less than 18 but is still seen as acceptable. I thought orcs that became adults earlier than humans would be ok...

I know as a standard for people its 18 plus but what about when im writing about a fantasy world. What are the age guidlines to non human characters? For example in a story im making an orc is fully matured by age 14 as they need to develop and reproduce fast to keep their numbers up. Another...

https://chyoa.com/chapter/Introduction.438500 Thought this would be a nice open side project for me and anyone else to add onto. Basically gullible and vunerable humans are exposed to the alien environment for study so theres no limit to what creatures they can encounter and be subject to as far...

Basically thats what the unconcious male/ female is that you pick up. Theyre a monster in disguise.

what do you mean by rejection in the previous chapters for variety?