Advice for character dialogue?

[Coy-toy]

Hello all!

So I’ve been writing on here for a while now, mostly just as a hippy and a place to put down some perverted ideas. I know many parts of my writings are pretty amateur, but one place in particular seems to be in the dialogue. This is especially apparent in the earliest chapters, as I notice I really didn’t make an attempt to utilize conversation to flush out the characters.

Now that I am attempting to, I am hoping to get some advice on methods to flush this aspect out.

Link to story: https://chyoa.com/story/Latex-adventures.14518

 

[Fierbali111]

Yea, there definitely needs to be more dialog here. If you went to a weird latex kink resort wouldn't there be a ton of thoughts going through your head? Maybe try to imagine what the character is thinking and write that down so he or she is fleshed out more, not just being the eyes and ears of the audience.

Also, try to imagine the voice and attitude of a certain character in your head. How would they say or describe something? People speak in very different but often subtle ways. An easy example is a teenaged girl using the word "like" as a gap filler every few seconds.

 

[RejectTed]

Stay away from forcing exposition, but if you can work have a character introduce themselves naturally, you should. For example the latex zoo could have a receptionist for Anna to talk to and explain her goals. This would give subtle insight into her reaction to latex. Is she curious? weirded out? harboring repressed perversions?

Also, try to imagine the voice and attitude of a certain character in your head. How would they say or describe something? People speak in very different but often subtle ways. An easy example is a teenaged girl using the word "like" as a gap filler every few seconds.

That is something I need to work on. Word use is also important, both the words the character uses (womanhood, pussy, cock socket) and the words you use. If Anna sees and pets a latex puppy she could laugh "oh my," mumble "oh my," or sneer "oh my."

 

[Coy-toy]

Thanks for the advice! I’m trying to add this in the new chapters now, and will likely go back and change the old chapters to fit this advice. The unique voice for each character, especially the mental voice of the protagonist is great advice!