Thanks Dusk! Always happy to hear my work is appreciated, even if it has been said a hundred times before!
I am looking forward to his too. my main thread was a break off from Vain's thread as well. any new direction is good for this story
So first thread submitted, hope you like it. Criticism is welcome, especially the creative kind. I have an idea on where I'm going and hopefully when I'm done it comes across as familiar without feeling like I've plagiarized too much from Duskford, Vain, and all the other contributors to this story. Tall order since I really like much of what has already been done but want to splice the story to get it to where I want it to go.
It was really good, umbra, the start with Colin spying on them was a nice touch. Don't worry too much about your first threads becoming too similar to the other writer's threads, the beginning of the story doesn't leave too much room for innovations. It's where you lead the characters that's what counts, and I'm looking forward to read what you have in store for the gang.
Not too worried about the beginning, more worried about the middle because I'm trying to get to the place where Vain left off. Gavin being a chyoa writer is an important point, as well as some of the other stuff. Chloe and Heathers' behavior. Don't plan on using the supporting characters much, but I plan on showing little snippets of what they are doing. I may be a little slow going for awhile as I finish up some of my other non chyoa projects. It's been some time since I have written any erotica, hope I'm not too rusty.
I'm sure you'll do a good job. I also found it interesting when Vain made Gavin a writer, although I guess that maybe he went a bit over the top with Chloe, but I know every writer has their style and I'd never interfere.
I actually knew a girl who acted like chloe back in college. 22 year old virgin, who suddenly couldn't get enough. Sadly, she dropped out when she found out she was pregnant. I haven't heard anything about her since.
Mostly done with 2nd thread but having some trouble getting the scene between H/K/A to work as well as I'd like. Seems to me there should have been more friction since K just invited himself.
Heather doesn't like Kurt too much nowadays but she'd never truly hate him, so she doesn't mind his presence that bad, she just figures that, if she can keep him away from her female friends, everything is going to be fine.
Mostly using your back story, but mine has Kurt's presence causing a couple of her friends to drop the cabin trip due to rumors. H/K are having an argument, when everyone else arrives. A hearing about the rumors attacks K causing H to defend K (family). Things are resolved but strained. H has heard the rumors, but doesn't want ti believe them. A heard about them during a phone call to one of the missing campers. B/V just know A is upset. Z/C/G are unaware. Two character background only, Kim Nguyen, Junior, cheerleader, expected to take Heather's place as Head Cheerleader next year. Chen Nguyen, Senior, Soccer, Kim's older brother. Invite as part of the hookup Vicky with a nice guy plan. I was also planning on having Lisa be a cheerleader as well.
Oh, I see. Go ahead with it, it's a great backstory, adds an extra layer of conflict between some of the characters.
Dropouts. They will travel to California to visit family, but that info might not make it into the story. Mostly they exist to make the world feel larger and add clues that Kurt really shouldn't be trusted in this version of the story. Still undecided if Lisa will rejoin the group after Kurt leaves. Adding her will add more sex and some conflict with two of the girls, but I haven't fully mapped out that part of the story.
Got it, that'd make them additions to the expanded universe consisted of characters created by other authors that don't appear in the story, such as Heather's ex-boyfriends created by Yarkoz, and Chloe's friend Meagan, created by Patzo. Lisa is a good addition, hot in more ways than one.
I've got the H/K intro, A/H/K fight done, but I'm not 100% happy with it. I'll let it air for a couple days see if I can tweak it better. If not, I'll post it as is and just move on. And in the interest of moving in, Z/H or Z/C for rooming? B/A and K/V are set for story reasons, but I have ideas for either pairing. Personally leaning towards Z/H.
Zack and Heather have been my favorite from the start, so I'm definitely biased that way (though I've never actually written a scene with them). Though as Duskford, John, and many others have written, Zack and Chloe are definitely a powerful pair for obvious reasons.
I'd suggest rooming Zack and Heather together; Zack and Chloe seems to only work when one focus on them as a pair in their branch, exactly due to them being a powerful pair, as Yarkoz said. By the way, good to see you around here, Yarkoz.
