At the Cabin

Now that my life has settled down considerably, I've got Zack and Heather's date back on track. Still working on my scenes between Zack, Vicky, and Heather as well as a new story I'm writing about two friends who grew up together.
 
Duskford, are you planning to continue the story where where you left off or focusing on the re-write? just curious bacause you stopped at a good place for people to take the story different directions but i for one was waiting to see where you took it before even brainstorming different paths
 
Cretan_Bull14 said:
Now that my life has settled down considerably, I've got Zack and Heather's date back on track. Still working on my scenes between Zack, Vicky, and Heather as well as a new story I'm writing about two friends who grew up together.
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Looking forward to see what you have planned, Cretan_Bull14!

henrytemp said:
Duskford, are you planning to continue the story where where you left off or focusing on the re-write? just curious bacause you stopped at a good place for people to take the story different directions but i for one was waiting to see where you took it before even brainstorming different paths
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I'm focusing on the rewrite, henrytemp. Do you have something in mind?
 
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duskford said:
I'm focusing on the rewrite, henrytemp. Do you have something in mind?
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Oh I have some things in mind but not sure I want to be the one to write them haha. Thinking about it... without copping out and breaking up the scene, the scene I *would* write next would be to replay the prior scene but through Dustin's eyes. Him flashing back and remembering the handjob in the car, that his cock was the first she'd touched and leave it at that same moment where you left off and he must decide whether to run out and stop it or sit back and watch.

Has anyone described the Dustin/Vicky handjob in detail?
 
henrytemp said:
Oh I have some things in mind but not sure I want to be the one to write them haha. Thinking about it... without copping out and breaking up the scene, the scene I *would* write next would be to replay the prior scene but through Dustin's eyes. Him flashing back and remembering the handjob in the car, that his cock was the first she'd touched and leave it at that same moment where you left off and he must decide whether to run out and stop it or sit back and watch.

Has anyone described the Dustin/Vicky handjob in detail?
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The next thread I had planned for that scene would be more or less what you described, but it'd be a scene where I'd show what all characters inside the ranger station were thinking just before all of them orgasmed. Your idea to focus it on Dustin is great though, it even plays out as a 'cuckold' situation if he decides to just watch. As for the handjob scene, no one described it yet.
 
duskford said:
Your idea to focus it on Dustin is great though, it even plays out as a 'cuckold' situation if he decides to just watch.
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Haha I don't know if I could do that to poor Dustin though. My preference would be for him to attempt to stop it and then either succeed or fail. The cuckold trolls annoy the fuck out of me, but not actually a fan of having characters go full into it. (And I don't understand spending all that time hating on stories you hate, but I digress) But I'd leave it off where someone who wanted to go that route certainly could.

I wanted to expand on what I said on the comments about that last scene. I went back and read through several times and that whole series is so great and the tension is off the charts. It's crazy but the actual sex going on is the least interesting part of it all and that says something. But there was one little detail you added that I don't think I had been mentioned before, that to me really helped to make it more interesting and that was that Vicky's breasts were slightly larger. There's something about that kind of detail that helps make it more real. So again, compliments on a fantastic scene.
 
henrytemp said:
Haha I don't know if I could do that to poor Dustin though. My preference would be for him to attempt to stop it and then either succeed or fail. The cuckold trolls annoy the fuck out of me, but not actually a fan of having characters go full into it. (And I don't understand spending all that time hating on stories you hate, but I digress) But I'd leave it off where someone who wanted to go that route certainly could.

I wanted to expand on what I said on the comments about that last scene. I went back and read through several times and that whole series is so great and the tension is off the charts. It's crazy but the actual sex going on is the least interesting part of it all and that says something. But there was one little detail you added that I don't think I had been mentioned before, that to me really helped to make it more interesting and that was that Vicky's breasts were slightly larger. There's something about that kind of detail that helps make it more real. So again, compliments on a fantastic scene.
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LOL, I don't think the cuckold trolls reached "At the Cabin" yet, but still, you better be careful.

You're right, the sex between Colin and Emily isn't important, I just put it there to serve as a cause to whatever happens between Victoria and Brandon with Dustin watching; you might even notice I didn't spend too much time describing what they're doing, most of it is told by the three voyeurs. About Vicky's breasts, it was always that way, I just didn't describe them well on the early threads; her size is somewhere between medium-sized and large (like Heather and Chloe); to Brandon, who is used to Ashley's more modest pair, it's a really good novelty.
 
duskford said:
LOL, I don't think the cuckold trolls reached "At the Cabin" yet, but still, you better be careful.
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I was going through my favorite stories and clicking on tags to maybe find new stories i would like. That is when i realized "The After Party" had the tag "cuckold" which is what probably brought out the trolls. I've said this before but for me it's all about tension. In Vain's first thread he created great tension between kurt/ashley, although in the end he kicked kurt out. This whole thing b/t Brandon/Vicky, again great tension. When one or both participants are fighting the sexual encounter, but circumstances are pushing them toward it to me that's the best scenes. And I don't mean in a rape way, just a a "this is wrong i have feelings for another but this is so hot" way.

In 'the after party' was some great tension built up b/t the main character, his crush and the asshole. But the it went off the rails into full cuckold. When lorderotica came back with a new scene i was excited b/c he brought back the tension and set up possibly a really good set of events. then I remembered from seeing his threads in "at the cabin" he tends to do what I call "thread bombing" in other words, he sets up (and is really good at setting up) possible sex scenes, but never writes them himself. Not criticizing because helping other writers is a good thing, moreso disappointed that so many great scenes he has set up have never been completed
 
Don't know about you guys, but I can't wait to see what the new site looks like. Having been a visitor since the first site was up and running, and contributing since about 2007 or so, I can tell you that CHYOO/CHYOA has come a long way.
 
Cretan_Bull14 said:
Don't know about you guys, but I can't wait to see what the new site looks like. Having been a visitor since the first site was up and running, and contributing since about 2007 or so, I can tell you that CHYOO/CHYOA has come a long way.
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I'm looking forward to it as well. I've only started writing on CHYOA, but I already was a lurker on the old CHYOO.
 
Wow, feels like forever since I was here. New site design will take some getting used to. Doesn't work as well on my phone. Haven't forgotten the story just have not had the time. Dementia is not something I would wish on anyone and is ten times worse for the family.

Liked what you did with the prologue Duskford.
 
Glad to see you around here, umbra. As I've always said, real life comes first.

If by prologue you mean the other story, thanks! Although, it'll be a while before they get to the trip, and all that happens before it will lead to a very different trip.
 
sorry I've been posting on another story more than this one :P but glad some of you are reading haha. It's a case of being closer to the goal and so easier to make the push. still my goal is to get new chapters up on the cabin as soon as possible. And if I can, I want to write the followup to Duskford's Vicky/Brandon post that I outlined earlier. Expect that to be draining to write so just need to prep myself
 
Hey Duskford, I've got a couple of threads I want to post that continue the story of Zack and Heather in town. Since you've posted it several times, I was wondering which one was the main story line you had going so I don't post it to that one.
 
henrytemp said:
sorry I've been posting on another story more than this one :P but glad some of you are reading haha. It's a case of being closer to the goal and so easier to make the push. still my goal is to get new chapters up on the cabin as soon as possible. And if I can, I want to write the followup to Duskford's Vicky/Brandon post that I outlined earlier. Expect that to be draining to write so just need to prep myself
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Yeah, I remember it was quite tiresome to write that scene, lol. But it was nearly to the end considering what I was doing. Of course, you can prolong it more if you want.

Cretan_Bull14 said:
Hey Duskford, I've got a couple of threads I want to post that continue the story of Zack and Heather in town. Since you've posted it several times, I was wondering which one was the main story line you had going so I don't post it to that one.
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I don't quite remember the Story Map in that regard, but the main one is the storyline which ended in the Vicky/Brandon scene henrytemp was talking about, and in that main one they didn't meet Zack's mom as in the other versions. But you can post to the main one too if you want, I won't go back to it.
 
duskford said:
Yeah, I remember it was quite tiresome to write that scene, lol. But it was nearly to the end considering what I was doing. Of course, you can prolong it more if you want.
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In all the writing I've done, never experienced the fatigue I feel from writing intense scenes like I have writing on this site. maybe it's the nature of the material i don't know
 
So, I've brought the resolution to the bear costumes/mystery guy case in a book on Azure Rocks Chronicles. If you switch out the characters, it was Robert's brother who wanted the Park to lose value so he could buy all the lands for cheap, all the while framing Robert, to allow him to take control of Ravers Enterprises.
 
Thinking about starting a path here as a side project to Azure Rocks Chronicles. It'd be written in first-person from Zack's perspective and the ultimate goal probably would be to get all the girls.
 
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