Well, allow me to increase that giddy expectancy then, Yarkoz, lol. I've included in the poll the pairings most likely to appear in the story in a way or another. I wanted to list every pairing in the poll, but the forum limits the number of options.
Taylor will make her debut in this new version during Chapter Four. There was a phone conversation between she and Zack in the first chapter and there'll be another one in the second chapter, but actual scenes featuring the older of the Bishop siblings will have to wait until the fourth one.
For me i like Zack/Blonde most it seems like Also like the idea of Gavin with Chloe, Taylor or maybe even Heather.
By Zack/Blonde, you mean either Victoria, Ashley or Hannah? Agree with you that Gavin with Heather or Taylor are interesting pairings as well.
Yeah all three, for some reason I like the blondes most with Zack. I dont even have a preference for blondes, just like their characters most.
Have some news about the story regarding a major change if comparing it to At The Cabin. Two, actually, but let's start with the first one. You guys might have noticed that in one of my latest threads, Heather thought about "her parents' young secretary". That's Leah from the first story, she was Robert's secretary and lover, since his wife Brooke didn't share the same view he head about sex, and their marriage remained only for appearances. The change is that, this time, Brooke has the same mindset as Robert and they are a happy couple of swingers. Leah works for both of them in this version, and they share her in bed as well. The other change is that Robert and Brooke have another daughter, Heather's older sister. She's 23-years-old, but she doesn't approve her parents' lifestyle, so she left the house for college as soon as she graduated high school, only reaching out to contact and visit Heather from time to time. Oh, there's a third change. Jennifer will be Zack's older cousin in this version.
I was wondering if you intend to write in the future about Gavin's home situation. Particularly, why does he think that his father might no help him and what kind of problems does his mother have.
It will/would come up eventually. Gavin's father died when he was about 3~4-years-old, and that's the main reason that made him shy and awkward as he is today. His mother had to work a lot more, so he grew up a bit alone, except for his uncle's occasional visits. It was only when he was eight, meeting Zack and Chloe, that he had his first real friends. That's why his father can't help him, he's dead. This backstory is true for both Azure Rocks Chronicles and At the Cabin.
So, that discussion about Lisa having a larger role in the "At the Cabin" thread, coupled with some ideas I had for the alternate path I was writing for boomer97's thread, made me think about a a new path for this story. It'll feature Lisa a bit more heavily, and will probably start after chapter 1 ends (the scene where Chloe spies Zack and Lisa having sex). Another change is a physical one for Lisa, instead of having dark brown eyes as on 'At the Cabin', I gave her dark green eyes here instead, to have a similar trait to Victoria (one of the reasons Zack fell for her at first). EDIT: Going to make a few changes in chapter 1 too, such as the infirmary scene with Victoria (which I'm going to make a bit lighter), and I'll thinking about removing the underground sex club plot altogether (if it doesn't affect the story I have in mind).
You guys might have noticed that I changed the title of the two versions of chapter 2 currently in the story to include the tags (Ashley path) and (Lisa path), well, this is due to an idea I had a couple of days ago, which I'm very giddy about, lol. I'm going to write paths for all the main girls, that is, Ashley, Lisa, Heather, Chloe, Victoria, Hannah, Taylor, and maybe even Jennifer and Mary Moreau. It might sound like a massive project, but it's not that big, which is why I'm excited about doing this and I'll explain why. It'll feel a little like a game, with all the paths having the same predesigned order of events, but, depending on the path chosen by the reader, that is, which girl he chose as Zack's girlfriend, these events will play out differently and open up new possibilities. An example, there'll be a scene involving Jennifer and Zack's cousin James later in the story; if Lisa is Zack's girlfriend, they'll stumble into the scene and only watch through a gap in the door as James fucks Jennifer and Lisa jerks Zack off; if the reader chose Ashley's path, she and Zack won't be together at the time of that scene, so Zack will be with James when they seduce Jennifer, double teaming her; on Heather's path, she and Zack will stumble into the scene, but unlike Lisa's path, they'll join in and make it a foursome. On every path, Gavin's girlfriend will also be a different one, because the events unfold differently. Also, in the paths that one of the boys get Heather as a girlfriend, they'll find themselves doing kinkier stuff, like participating in three-ways or even comitting incest. I'll be writing Ashley's and Lisa's paths at first, until they get finished. Then I'll go back and do the other girls'. Hope everyone likes it!
Changed Lisa's eye color back to brown for diversity's sake, and switched Zack's mom's name to Monica (as it is on At the Cabin). Also dropping in another example on how my project will work. At the end of chapter 2, we'll have Ashley's birthday party, and the predesigned events are: Ashley will get drunk and pass out on her closet and Brandon wants to have some extreme fun. So, on Ashley's path, Zack will also get drunk and fall into the closet before Ashley, so when she gets there, they have drunk sex, as for Brandon, he'll try to hit on Hannah, who will not like it and tell Ashley the next day, causing her to break up with Brandon. On Lisa's path, Zack won't get drunk and will spend the night by Lisa's side, and Brandon will hit on Heather, scoring himself a one-night stand (after lying to her that Ashley is doing the same, of course). On Heather's path, Zack will have fun by staying by the head cheerleader's side all night, which in turn pisses Lisa off and drives her to Brandon's arms for the night. I've slightly altered the schedule as well, I'll do the same chapter for each girl before moving on to the next chapter.
Alright, here's what I've done so far: - The original storyline ended up being Heather's path, being the most advanced one at the beginning of chapter 3. Ashley's will branch out from the hot tub scene in the end of chapter 2. - Chloe's path still has to be introduced. It'll probably play out like Lisa's path, as an alternate chapter 2. - Lisa's path is going strong, nearing the end of chapter 2. - Hannah's path will probably be an alternate version of Ashley's. - I had started Victoria's path as an alternate version of the scene when she and Heather went into the boys' locker room on chapter 1, but I had a different idea and changed the tag. That path is what I'm calling now the 'Detective path', where Zack will really delve into the mystery of the underground sex club and others around the school, as opposed to other paths, where he'll only scratch the surface of that mystery. Because of that, this will be the longest path, and will play out differently from the others. I'll start another path for Victoria eventually.
Okay, thought I should bring the discussion of the latest plans for Azure Rocks Chronicles to its appropriate thread. A quick overview of what I posted on the "At the Cabin" thread: - It'll be a Zack/Victoria and Gavin/Ashley story. - I'll cover the time before Ashley's 18th birthday party, which will happen on Ravers Cabin and will be the end of the story. - At some point, Zack and Gavin will be in a hot tub with Hannah and Taylor in the Bishops' backyard. Zack will have sex with Hannah and Gavin with Taylor then, not sure if it'll happen in the same room or in separate ones. - Near the end, there will be a threeway between Gavin, Ashley and Hannah. Zack and Victoria will also have a similar scene, not sure with who at this point. Made some changes to make Madison a twin sister for Brandon, as she is on "At the Cabin". The change can be noticed in this thread: https://chyoa.com/chapter/At-the-cafeteria.213191 The new thread will start as an off-shoot of this thread: https://chyoa.com/chapter/The-reporter-and-the-hero.237757 I'd say it's best to read the threads leading to this one. Another thing, I was thinking about a plot, but I'm not sure if it'd just complicate the story or even if you guys would like to read something like that. It'd be something like Zack putting on some sort of mask and starting to prevent bullies from beating weaker guys, with Victoria getting curious to find out everything she can about the masked guy at the same time she's falling for Zack.
The premise for the story sounds great. Especailly Gavin ending up with Ashley, let alone having a threesome with Ashley and Hannah, and considering what a jerk Brandon is to Gavin, him ending with Ashley is poetic justice. Personally i would of prefered if Gavin ended up with Taylor, but i imagine that is a bit more difficult, considering she is in college and 3 years older than him. If the pairing isn't set in stone, it would also be great to see Gavin with Madison, or if Ashley would be a bit more wild in her relationship with Gavin, than she currently is with Brandon (like she is in several threads in "At the Cabin"). Can't wait to see how the story develops!
Thanks! About Ashley, Brandon's been trying to be wild with her and she doesn't quite enjoy it (see the cafeteria scene where she's introduced to the story), mainly because she's not comfortable with him forcing situations on her. Maybe with a sweeter guy like Gavin, her own wild side can be awakened (well, she'll have a threeway with her own sister, I'd say that's quite wild, lol). Gavin probably won't get involved with Madison in this one, mainly because she's a minor character here, but also because the story won't be long, he'll lose his virginity on that scene with Taylor and that's what will give him confidence to go for Ashley on her party. There won't be time for Gavin to play around too much. An update on Chloe, I'm really considering developing a pairing between her and Zack's older cousin James, who was mentioned in a scene.
I'd like it if you'd find a way to stick some Zack/Chloe action in your story as well. Mind, if it managed to fit the story, or fit into how you want the story to go. I'll probably think of a way to fit it in somewhere myself, if I ever get back to writing that is.
I always had a bit of a problem in including Zack/Chloe in storylines where they weren't the main pairing, since I always figured that, if they were going to fool around, they would no doubt fall in love. Still, I think I can have them having a moment where both of them are feeling horny and then having Chloe figure that she wants a guy like Zack, but not exactly Zack. That's where his cousin can come in, I guess. In a longer story, they could become fuck-buddies before they got together with other people, but I really don't want to make this too much long. A rough outline of scenes I want to do: 1. Lisa/William and Brandon/Heather, in the locker room. 2. Maybe the Zack/Chloe scene. 3. Heather with one of her dad's business partners. 4. Zack/Hannah and Gavin/Taylor in the hot tub on the Bishops' backyard. toying with the idea of having Taylor joining Zack and Hannah once Gavin sleeps or passes out. 5. Brandon with one of the cheerleaders or maybe Heather again. 6. Chloe and Zack's cousin. 7. Zack and Victoria 8. Gavin and Ashley 9. Might have some additional scenes at Ravers Cabin before it ends. 10. Two epilogues, one with a threeway between Gavin, Ashley and Hannah. And another one with Zack and Vicky having a threesome with another girl who I didn't choose yet. I also still want to fit in a scene with Mary in the middle of all that. I'm split between having her in a threesome with Zack and Vicky here or with Zack and Heather on 'At the Cabin'. If I leave that scene for 'At the Cabin', I might have her triple-teamed by Brandon and two of his friends here.
There's one thing I'm thinking about lately. In order to set this even more apart from At the Cabin, turn it into a 1st person PoV story.
Just a thought, but i think it would be great if there was a thread in which Gavin ends up with Heather, i am not talking just having sex with her once and maybe more in the future like in Boomer97 thread, from At the Cabin, (which is great by the way), but a real, long term stable realationship. I think Heather could have a good influence on Gavin, giving him more confidence and getting him out of his shell. Plus, considering that Heather is somewhat wild and a bit of a freak, the sex scenes could be awesome. Not that i'm complaining that in Boomer97 thread Gavin will end up (i hope) with Taylor, given their mutual attraction and the fact that he just realised that Heather is not interested in a relationship at the moment.
