Final Fantasy Worlds feedback

FallenSaint

FallenSaint

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Alright, looking for feedback and ideas on the story Final Fantasy Worlds. Me and Duskford have been tossing ideas back and forth, but would love some more feedback and ideas.
 
I'm having fun with the story so far. I'm trying not to rush or force sex scenes, though I think I have a few about to pop up. I'm wanting to mostly push story with this, but have the sex come in naturally. Its a good way to see a dream team of Final Fantasy Characters taking on a challenge bigger than any one world could handle.
 
Going to work on the Honey Bee scene tomorrow. Hope to have it finished and get more of the story rolling sometime in the afternoon, but nothing is promised. After that, I've got plans to intro the first of the three villains to the group. Having them in Midgar makes it perfect for one of them...
 
A scene at the Honey Bee would be a good point to include some erotic content, I guess. Looking forward to see which villain will appear first!
 
I have an idea for some erotic content at thee Honey Bee. I don't want to go too big there with it since Corneo is wanting to pick a girl. He'll want first dibs, but what if the men just take a blowjob? They could probably get away with having a blowjob here and there from a new girl without the Don catching wind of it.

As for the first villain, it is between two of them. Possibly have both show up. One will be leading
Deepground forces
while the other will simply have brought
an army of monsters.
If they both show up, one will have his forces moving through streets of Midgar while the other directly attacks Shinra's tower.

This will also intro a few more allies for the group. I have some fun ideas with how this could go. Right now leaning towards the first option or the third option. If I go with third, I'm thinking the second force will come in because the villain leading that will get bored and basically just launch an attack as a way to get amusement.
 
That's what I thought, the guards sneaking a blowjob before sending the girl to Don Corneo.

Either way can be great, I think. You chose a good trio of villains.
 
So who do you think it should be? We have Tifa and Quistis trying to get in, so he will want his "Payment" for them to get in... I'm leaning towards Quistis and giving him a Glasses fetish, though giving him a titfuck fetish could be interesting for Tifa....

Thanks, I put a lot of thought into it. Genesis, who wants to be a hero (Crisis Core for source) but can't for several reasons. Kefka, who is insane and enjoys destruction, and Yunaleska for the more behind the scenes work. Thinking about it, I will go with option 3 I think. It lets me intro all three villains in a way (Villain 2 talking to villain 3 before jumping in for his/her own fun) and Villain 1 already on the ground leading the fight. Thinking that the Heroes will only see V1 for the scene so they will not be quite ready for the others just yet.
 
I'd go with Tifa for that scene, but it's your choice.

Introducing all three villains at once seems reasonable. After that, then maybe you can take your time with each one at different times.
 
Lol Tifa it is then. I might go back and do a variant scene with Quistis, but I've never done the linking before so I'll have to play with it to get that right I think. I'm not even sure how you do it to be honest.

I figured with the intro of all three in the first (Well maybe second) big thing to happen, the readers at least get a view of each of them as a person. When the battle/escape of Midgar is over, each villain will move off to work on their own plans for victory. At times they may act together and other times separate, but I think the first time will be good having at least a showing.
 
First and second Honey Bee scene is up! I hope you enjoyed the scene with Tifa. I really put a lot of work into it lol.
 
I've dropped off a comment there. The scene was really hot and sexy, Tifa was enjoying herself so much that I was starting to think she was going to fuck the thug, lol.
 
Thank you both so much for your comments! I really worked hard on that scene to make it perfect. I figured with Tifa being a little pent up thanks to Cloud and already starting to want Cecil, she would be a little more willing to enjoy herself than even she would expect.

I really did think about having her fuck him, but I thought that would be rushing the scene and she does have a mission. Lol I thought having her actually charge him was a fun idea though. I hadn't originally planned it when coming up with the scene, but it just felt so fun that I had to add it in.

Lol Moonblack, I hope you decide to add to the story and thanks for the link. I still need to figure out how to do it here though until the other version is up, but I'll worry about that later.

I'll probably try to work on a few more pages Sunday. I would try for tomorrow, but I've got a full day planned with the wife and kids, so that will have to wait. I've got the the a vague plan for the next two or three pages, a few pages completely thought out after that, and then after Midgar I am still working on ideas. I'm open to pretty much anything and there are currently three directions they can go once they leave.

Who can guess the next potential ally I have planned?
 
duskford said:
Tifa charging the thug has a bright side, the group gets more gil to spend on equipments/materia/whatever.
Click to expand...

Lol true, but that wasn't what I was thinking about right then. It just seemed like a fun way to get her in character and let her enjoy herself more.
 
Alright, really getting rolling with the Don Corneo scenes now! This will be the first big part of the Midgar Arc, and I have several branching ideas here.

Now a confession of sorts: Fighting would have led to a bad end. I'm going to go back and add it in later, but this submission is the only hope the girls have. Not a lot of hope, but its there.... I hope I can get some feedback on the latest scenes because I've put a lot of work in them with not a lot of time to do so thanks to my new job lol. I'm hoping the quality of work hasn't dropped because of it.

Now, I'm thinking of doing a second Hero group. This one all female and set for MANY bad ends. Thinking I need a team that features: Perky Girl, Warrior Girl, Healer Girl, Skill Girl, and Dealer's Choice (Whoever I feel fits after the others)

Now I've been giving this some thought and I have other teams I want to run, so I'm going to try and not overlap the ones I'm preparing at least. So the team currently looks like this:

Perky: Vanille or Riku (Leaning towards Vanille for reasons that will be obvious)
Warrior: Freya
Healer: Rosa (After Years version where she is queen and mother.)
Skill: X-2 Gunner Yuna
Dealer: still open. Going to do some studies and see who could fit well with this team.

So basically this team will lose. A lot. Every place a bad end can happen it will. I'll explore the bad end before moving on with a branch where they succeed (Poorly) and move on. I've even already decided on the actual ending. (Not planning a "Good" ending, but this one will be fun and interesting.)

Any ideas for fun ways to torment this team and who the Dealer's Choice could be?
 
I, for one, enjoyed the scenes with the Don so far. The idea of Quistis and Tifa using sex to overcome situations is really great. I don't think the quality has dropped.

For the warrior girl of your all female team, you could consider Celes or Ashe as well. For Dealer's Choice, I'd suggest those two as well, along with Terra or Faris.
 
Glad to hear sleep deprivation hasn't dulled my writing lol.

I don't think using sex was their first or favorite option, but it sort of happened to them and they are stuck. Going to enjoy writing the next few scenes too lol.

I didn't even think of Ashe lol. Faris I have other thoughts for, so not wanting to add her in. Terra and Celes though were both candidates for DC too. I like Freya as warrior cause she non human, though she could technically fit DC too. Looking through some FF character lists for playable characters, Tactics advance actually gave some ideas: Little Vili and Eldena are both Viera, Sniper and Red Mage respectively.

I did have another idea though.... I have played two FF games that were based off of D&D. It could be interesting to put in one of my characters as one of them.

Luna: A viera Fencer. At one point she was the second in command/strike team leader of the Heroes of Light. After a journey through time to rescue a lost team member, she was basically brainwashed by the enemy and was a villain for the rest of the game with an esper inside her body. She was bisexual and used two swords thanks to being ambidextrous. A competent leader who as a good guy peaked when she led the team to secure one of the Crystals and later planned and executed a daring rescue that brought a team member back who had been sent into the past and lost his memory. She was later killed by her older sister to atone for both of their sins. Her sister died from her wounds after the battle.

Shalana The Serpent (My current character) a necromancer and death priestess of a desert clan. She is able to tame monsters and has a rather large snake constantly coiled about her body (Naga). She learned to sing and dance as part of her rituals but currently uses it to earn money to buy water for her clan. She ran away without permission to do this, having had every aspect of her life chosen for her, and wanting to have more freedom. She is actually promised to marry an older man to continue her family line and give birth to the next priest/priestess, but the rest of the party doesn't know this and she currently doesn't want to marry at all. (SPOILER: Character growth will have her learn to appreciate her position and agree to the marriage, spending the rest of the game as a married woman while her husband returns to the desert)
 
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