Jessica’s Choices - Another Life

So a poll is the only way I think I can go. Based on previous works, should I;

  • Get to the sex

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • Let it come naturally as intended

    Votes: 4 100.0%
  • Total voters
    4
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Hello all,

I’m back with a new story and shamelessly looking for feedback.

The new story is another Jessica’s Choices story, Another Life. The aim is to have this collection completely separate from the ones that came before, it’s an alternative life, a new beginning and somewhat slow at the moment.

I’m ten chapters in and introduced a multitude of potential scenarios, and I’m hoping that these could branch off in many different directions.

Link below:
https://chyoa.com/story/Jessica’s-Choices---Another-life.15965

So I’m here looking for some feedback, I’m particularly interested in the pacing of the story at the moment as I’ve written just under six thousand words and haven’t even got to the good stuff yet.
 
Slow isn't bad. A bit of plot development, take some time to develop the characters and situations. I'm interested to see where this goes.
 
Well didn't I say the same thing to you in our pm's the other day. Maybe now you'll believe me when i say slow can be a good thing. Good development in my opinion trumps a fast manufactured story. What one finds in a character can be used to alter the story taking it in ways you may have never thought to take it. Like my chapter where the next door neighbour lies his way into her bedroom!
 
gscmar64 said:
Well didn't I say the same thing to you in our pm's the other day. Maybe now you'll believe me when i say slow can be a good thing. Good development in my opinion trumps a fast manufactured story. What one finds in a character can be used to alter the story taking it in ways you may have never thought to take it. Like my chapter where the next door neighbour lies his way into her bedroom!
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I know!!! You have been the voice of reason on many occasions :)
 
Here again, looking to see if anyone would like to see me continuing down a different path whilst my current time is consumed writing about Jessica and Brad
 
Pictures or no pictures?
Hello all,
I didn’t want to spend to long on outlining character traits in the branch, link below; so I’ve deliberately tried to leave it open to interpretation but I’m wondering how it reads and if it does need images? Even just a chapter thrown on to show what they look like?

The chapter below introduces them but doesn’t go into too much detail, the following 7 chapters they are all involve in one way or another and I have what they look like in my head but I wanted to leave it to the reader. Any thoughts?
Thanks in advance
https://chyoa.com/chapter/Like-minded-friends.496577
 
Some folks like pictures, others prefer word-pictures. I can go either way, though I think even if you include pictures it is important to give clear descriptions of your characters.
 
Zeebop said:
Some folks like pictures, others prefer word-pictures. I can go either way, though I think even if you include pictures it is important to give clear descriptions of your characters.
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I agree and understand, as I say those chapters have been deliberately vague about the characters, but I hope I've put enough of a description in the following chapters, their dress sense for one thing trying to paint a picture
 
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