Leona

[RodsWriter]

I created this post to receive feedback on "Leona", an erotic story about a young model who is searching for money, pleasure and fame in her career.

I'm writing as a web series script, which sometimes may not please everyone. But besides enjoying the format, I think this gives the narrative more agility and lets the imagination flow freely.

I have a story line in development for the next few episodes, but I'm open to new ideas. And as I explained in the introduction to the story, if you have an idea for a prequel or spin-off, we can talk about it and add it to the plot.

I would like to receive constructive opinions and suggestions on the history and format.

Thanks for the reading!

(Link to "Leona": https://chyoa.com/story/Leona.15341)

 

[mindtheMILF]

You are right in that it isn't everybody's type of format. You are lucky that it is a format I am familiar with, even though I haven't done a story like it I can read it fairly well. I will say that it makes the story move along faster in this format. If I was to make one adjustment it would be more details into the locations and people's actions.

 

[dingsdongs]

This format looks like something new and unique to this site.

I'm afraid that it doesn't seem to be my cup of tea, but i hope you find an audience for it.