Monster Girls

SilverSpectre006

SilverSpectre006

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"If you don't have confidence, you are not going to do anything in life."

Well I'm confident in that I've improved this story much more from before so, here it goes.

https://chyoa.com/story/Monster-Girls.21210

Let me know if it's to your liking, if you have any requests or questions or comments go ahead and post them below.

A response would be nice, and just checking out the story alone is doing me a major solid. People forget that feedback is very important to the author after all hehe.

Quick edit! Rewrote the introduction, wanted to make it a bit more appealing. It's subject to change if it needs improvement but I like it better than the last one so far.

Odd recommendation but the first branch is more story focused so if you're mostly interested in the kinks and naughty bits I'd highly suggest you check out the other branch options. There's like five other ones and each of them offer something different so yea, enjoy!

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Damn it I was super confident I would get some replies XD oof. Perhaps the weekend will present a different outcome ahahaha

Deep breaths spectre, deep breaths.

"Reality is often disappointing..."
 
SilverSpectre006 said:
Damn it I was super confident I would get some replies XD oof. Perhaps the weekend will present a different outcome ahahaha

Deep breaths spectre, deep breaths.

"Reality is often disappointing..."
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There's nothing to be disappointed about. It isn't rare for posts here to not get a lot of activity. The forums aren't always as active as the popularity of the main site would suggest. Your writing is good enough that I think you should continue.

The only thing I would suggest...and I always try to suggest this when I see someone doing it. I suggest you focus on one or two branches of your story at a time instead of trying to branch out into 5 or 6 story arcs. It's tempting on a Choose Your Own Adventure story to branch out as much and as often as possible to give the reader plenty of choices, but if there's little substance behind those choices, then the number of branches you have are irrelevant.

I'm not saying that what you have is bad or substanceless, but if you keep in mind that each story branch is essentially a different story all on its own and you can see how having many options can drain your creative drive on your story.
 
merkros said:
There's nothing to be disappointed about.
The only thing I would suggest...and I always try to suggest this when I see someone doing it. I suggest you focus on one or two branches of your story at a time instead of trying to branch out into 5 or 6 story arcs. It's tempting on a Choose Your Own Adventure story to branch out as much and as often as possible to give the reader plenty of choices, but if there's little substance behind those choices, then the number of branches you have are irrelevant.
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Too true.
Someone pointed out in one of my previous posts that the story was too linear so I went above and beyond and added much more to it XD and yes that is the drawback, each story gets updated once or twice a week so all of them suffer a slow pace.

It does get a bit tiresome I agree, but I like it. I have plenty of ideas to work with so far, I have only slowed down recently due to a surgery I had a few days back. Recovery can be a bitch lol.

Nevertheless you are correct meine freund, and I am grateful for your feedback. Also a bit sorry at my second post, sometimes I tend to get insecure about my capabilities and ugh it becomes a major drag.

Wise words though, many thanks. Any other thoughts you'd like to add? :^)
 
SilverSpectre006 said:
Too true.
Someone pointed out in one of my previous posts that the story was too linear so I went above and beyond and added much more to it XD and yes that is the drawback, each story gets updated once or twice a week so all of them suffer a slow pace.
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There's always a happy median to have. It's a Choose your own adventure site, so yeah I can see people getting disappointed by too linear stories too. However, all things should be done in moderation. Lots of stories that have many options often never go anywhere because the writer is too focused on so many choices.


SilverSpectre006 said:
Nevertheless you are correct meine freund, and I am grateful for your feedback. Also a bit sorry at my second post, sometimes I tend to get insecure about my capabilities and ugh it becomes a major drag.
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I have (often) crippling anxiety and have deleted more chapters than I care to admit. So I get it.
 
merkros said:
There's always a happy median to have. It's a Choose your own adventure site, so yeah I can see people getting disappointed by too linear stories too. However, all things should be done in moderation.
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It's all about finding that sweet spot I suppose. Too bad about the anxiety, shame these aren't simple issues we can just turn off at will ahaha, but nice to know I'm not alone with that kinda stuff.
 
Well I have added a bunch of more chapters since I made this post, any update on feedback would be most appreciated and welcomed. Thanks :)
 
Don't worry too much about being linear. Overall, I must say the writing is very high quality. You've really captured the feel of the genre you were going with, and the sex scenes are pretty hot. Not usually a fan of the monster girl genre, but you've presented something quite readable and well thought out.
I look forward to seeing where you take it in the future and reading more paths.
 
brevdravis said:
Don't worry too much about being linear. Overall, I must say the writing is very high quality. You've really captured the feel of the genre you were going with, and the sex scenes are pretty hot. Not usually a fan of the monster girl genre, but you've presented something quite readable and well thought out.
I look forward to seeing where you take it in the future and reading more paths.
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Well haha, this made my day <3

Thanks for the kind words Brev, it is a huge compliment to know even if Monster Girls aren't your thing you still gave it a chance and I appreciate that immensely. The story isn't so big now but I hope in the future when a few branches reach their conclusions people will have given it a shot by then. And if not, well it is still a hobby and a fun time for me to write these stories hehe.

What a good way to start the day, thank you for the response!
 
I have added so much more to Monster Girls since my last update/response, so please feel free to give it another glimpse if you have the time to spare. Any feedback would be welcomed, and if you feel so generous to leave likes or god willing become a follower, know that you are making a certain author squeal with excitement as her day grows even better! :D
 
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