The Adventures of the Briarwolf Guild

[dearnise]

https://chyoa.com/story/the-adventures-of-the-briarwolf-guild

As I near completion of one episode in this story, the "Orc Invasion" episode, I'm going to set this forum thread up to allow for some constructive feedback on my first attempt at writing a story. I'm also open for any ideas you may have for the other two episodes that I will work on starting in the new year; whether that be plot ideas, or ideas for certain races that fall within Chyoo guidelines, or even character ideas.

 

[TigrisSeductor]

Like it! Quite a nice story, with a lot of potential for erotic situatuions.

My problem is only that this potential has not been elaborated on so far; although the story is quite expansive, it mostly just progresses the story forward, with few sexual encounters. You should rectify that!

Those encounters that did happen were quite tasteful, however, not over-the-top but not completely plain either.

 

[dearnise]

Like it! Quite a nice story, with a lot of potential for erotic situatuions.

My problem is only that this potential has not been elaborated on so far; although the story is quite expansive, it mostly just progresses the story forward, with few sexual encounters. You should rectify that!

Those encounters that did happen were quite tasteful, however, not over-the-top but not completely plain either.

I will work on making those sexual encounters more frequent. What I'm trying to do with this story, is make those sexual encounters have more meaning. In other words, I'm working to have the plot scenes have meaning, that leads to the sexual encounters. I didn't elaborate on the scene where Lyssandra was sexually assaulted, as I wasn't sure at the time, if sexual scenes with fantasy races like Orcs, is considered beastiality.

I am planning on adding new characters in the future, that will match up better with some of the existing characters that aren't already paired up. Some of the pairings will lead quickly to a sexual encounter, some will be drawn out more, to add variety. This is something I'm trying to do with my "Slut World" contributions. When I do start writing out the "Episode 2" story, I will be working on some additional sexual encounters, as they will likely feature at least one harem.