The horror stories of the Black Hollow city

those are good, I always feel that it is best to have something that reads well when it is a little thumbnail.
http://imgur.com/a/hEHsj

So something that doesn't have a lot of visual noise to it. I tend to crop larger images down as well to focus on one aspect of them.
 
Also it might be worth changing the subtitle to something like

"The darkly erotic tales of Black Hollow City"

The current one is kind of awkward to read.
 
The pics are great! Love the woman in the limo, the woman in red is a classic, the rain picture has the thriller atmosphere, the girls in cemetery certainly have the theme - as well as the shower/glass door scene aka. Psycho. I think we will keep the limo for now - it's quite erotic and has a proper shadow play... until we find something better. Maybe rotate the pictures and change it each month into something new?
 
So tell me if I am overstepping my bounds but I would like to take a crack at, sort of rewriting/Reformatting/reorganising the Intro page.

I think it might be better to have a more tight intro with the story idea seeds in a separate chapter. So people who just want to read will be drawn in and those who would like to write something can see the suggestions easily.
 
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lizisbest said:
So tell me if I am overstepping my bounds but I would like to take a crack at, sort of rewriting/Reformatting/reorganising the Intro page.

I think it might be better to have a more tight intro with the story idea seeds in a separate chapter. So people who just want to read will be drawn in and those who would like to write something can see the suggestions easily.
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No, you are not overstepping your bounds - I'm open to any suggestions that might improve the story (accepting them is another matter:)

Do you have something specific in mind?
 
Well, aside from the Story Seeds to a chapter of their own. I think it would be worthwhile to have first chapter be written sort of in the tone of something between the Crypt Keeper and the Twilight zone. Something to entice the reader in.
 
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