Ummm... can someone check to see if I got a bit too extreme? My "The Rulebook" Thread

[Tas]

(This is my first post here - I don't know if I'm breaking any of the forum mores by posting it like this)

Sooo... I really put a lot of effort into the first arc of my planned story. I'm curious about what the perception is of this thing. I might have gone a bit off the deep end, though, and I honestly can't tell if it's amazing or absolutely terrible.

Tags: Slaves, Rimming, Mindrape, Non-consensual, Femdom/femsub, Maledom, Cuckquean, Twins, Exhibitionism, Painal, Blowjob, Watersports/Piss Drinking, Humiliation, Mind Break, Transformation, MFFF, and a whole hell of a lot else that doesn't really fit a category.

(For the record, I'm least proud of the first chapter. I think it gets steadily better the further you go.)

The thread I added starts here: https://chyoa.com/chapter/[explicit-illustrated-section-of-thread-begins-here]-"First,-one-quick-thing-".557241

But I think a good starting point so you can get some background is here: https://chyoa.com/chapter/All-The-Girls-In-Your-Homeroom.358394

 

[fishcrem]

I glanced over it a bit might read it properly later along with the preamble but it looks well written.

As for thinking it might be too far that's going to depend solely on the reader as long as its not completely outrageous. With the warning at the start the reader should get an idea pretty early on especially with the gifs(which I like by the way!) and if they don't like it they'll stop reading on their own. Nothing to worry about in my eyes.

 

[Tas]

I'd say thanks, but - honestly, the first few chapters are fairly tame compared to what comes later. Let me know what you think once you've given the whole thing a look!

 

[Loeman]

If you like it, other people out there will like it.