Hello community, Looking for some assistance if possible, I'm trying to write a fight scene and have the choreography of the fight exact in my head but really struggling with the delivery. Examples: 1. Slowly walking behind the man, Lara grabbed at his ankles and brought him down towards her, crushing his face into the floor beneath him before sliding off and onto the floor at her feet. (Description before this may help but essentially the guard is in an elevated position and Lara plants his face into the floor beneath him) 2. Staring down the hallway littered with priceless artefacts and a large chair, a heavily armoured guard stood facing down at the main entrance gallery, his gun tracing the ground beneath him and taking aim at the door. Taking her opportunity without a moments notice and rushing towards the guard. Pelting down the hallway towards the guard, her light feet betraying her and giving away her position, the guard turned in time to see Lara leap and propelled herself from the chair jumping to the left and grabbing the guards head bending him backwards, leaving his head lodged into the banister before dropping safely to the ground. (don’t know if there is too much information here or if there needs to be more) 3 – 5 take place in the same room 3. Taking a deep breath and closing her eyes in bravery, Lara turned in the doorway and dropped to the floor, slid kicking the first guard behind the legs and sending him to the floor with a spray of bullets crashing into the celling. (Think I can live with this but still trying to perfect it) 4. “There she is!” shouted one of the men as he tried to drive the heel of his boot into Lara’s face but lost his screamed out in pain as Lara sunk her knife behind his knee then into his thigh as she climbed up his body to her feet. (Not sure how this reads and doesn’t really have the urgency) 5. Gunshots came thick like winter hail. The tin projectiles cutting through the thick smoggy air, oblivious to their purpose. Each one ripping into something and battering into the guards back Lara used as a shield. (Want to try and write something about her dropping to the floor and using said guards gun against the man shooting – perhaps something like the green night vision of the man’s goggles lit up as the sparks from his comrades gun pointed at him blew)
This is how the chapter is shaping up at the moment Opening the window and sliding into her house, Lara carefully stepped onto the wooded floors and removed her socks and boots, stepping lightly onto the cold floor with her bare feet and crouched down slightly. Some residual smoke hanging in the air, shifting like ghosts in the breeze and obscuring the hallway like fog in an alley on a humid night. Staring down the hallway littered with priceless artefacts and a large chair, a heavily armoured guard stood facing down at the main entrance gallery, his gun tracing the ground beneath him and taking aim at the door. Taking her opportunity without a moments notice and rushing towards the guard. Pelting down the hallway towards the guard, her light feet betraying her and giving away her position, the guard turned in time to see Lara leap and propelled herself from the chair jumping to the left and grabbing the his head bending him backwards, leaving his head lodged into the banister before dropping safely to the ground. Adjusting her hair and pulling her tank top back downwards over her combat trousers, Lara hugged the wall and slithered towards the grand hall awash with flashlights and hushed footsteps. Nearing the doorway, Lara peered inwards at six figures wandering the perimeter of the room. Taking a deep breath and closing her eyes in bravery, Lara turned in the doorway and dropped to the floor, slid kicking the first guard behind the legs and sending him to the floor with a spray of bullets crashing into the celling, grasping his knife from his leg and sinking it into his neck with brutal accuracy. The sudden pelting of silenced bullets ricocheting I to the celling set the other guards on alert. “There she is!” shouted one of the men, his night vision goggles trained on Lara’s downed body as he tried to drive the heel of his boot into her face but lost his footing and screamed out in pain as Lara sunk her knife behind his knee then into his thigh as she climbed up his body and to her feet. Gunshots came thick like winter hail. The tin projectiles cutting through the thick smoggy air, oblivious to their purpose. Each one ripping into something and battering into the guards back Lara used as a shield. The power of the bullets knocking her down as she grabbed the gun which hung around the heavy, lifeless body. Lara pulled the trigger and yanked the weapon towards the reflection of the muzzle flash in her enemy's googles.
Lara slowly walked behind him, grabbed his ankles and yanked him off his feet. The man tried to break his fall with his hands but his face crushed on the concrete of the loading dock anyway. Groaning pained, he slid off the edge of the dock and lands in front of her feet like a wet sack. (Not sure about the elevated position. Is there a specific example of it?) One of the men tried to drive the heel of his boot into Lara's face. "There she—" he shouted while the tough girl stepped aside with a twirl but suddenly screamed as her knife sunk into his thigh. Lara groaned and... (not sure if I understood the scene) ... The power of the bullets knocked her down as she grabbed the gun which hung around the heavy, lifeless body. Lara pulled the trigger and yanked the weapon towards the reflection of the muzzle flash in her enemy's googles.
The sudden pelting of silenced bullets ricocheting to the ceiling set the other guards on alert. "There she is!" one of them shouted, his night vision goggles trained on Lara's downed body as he tried to drive the heel of his boot into her face. Lara quickly turned to her side and drew up her knee. The guard groaned as her bare heel hit the ankle of his standing leg, trying to maintain his balance. (I think the front leg would be bent) At the same time, the ___ girl pushed her body back a foot or two, sat up and sank her knife into the top of the man's thigh. He screamed loudly as Lara pulled herself to her feet but suddenly became silent as his body jerked. Gunshots came thick like winter hail. I'm glad if it's helpful.
