Hey there children, Radio here. I've started writing my first original story. Its called: Chance and I'm not totally certain where I'm gunna be going with it yet, all I know is that the erotic bits will be spaced out a good bit and there will be a bit more plot and stuff to it than most stories. I know not a lot of people like that, but Im just writing however I want and I would really appreciate any feedback or criticism that people can give! I really want to become better at writing as I haven't done it much over the years. If you enjoy the story go ahead and write what you like about it. Thanks!
In a word: Awesome. I really like it. Specifically your descriptions, they are fantastic. Sorry for the short review, but I can't think of much else to say besides keep it up.
I try, but its so hard to put whats in my head through the filter of my hands and my neanderthalesque vocabulary. Thank god for the thesaurus.
I feel for you, I can't number how many times I have half a story in my head in minute details but spend hours trying to write it without using the same word ten times in a paragraph or try to remember how to say something in English. Don't despair. I love the beginning of it already and what you wrote is really good. Starting a new setting is hard (balancing giving some lore versus not boring the reader.), it gets easier in later chapters. Good luck and continue the good work.
Thanks :') I took a couple days break to settle my moods. Im gunna try and gather my notes and continue tommorow with the Fool clan route. Avendra and Smurna get the conclusion to their drunken night out and im gunna write the other route for staying in as well. Please anybody feel free to add to the story from wherever you all see fit
