A Party Gone Wrong

After 4 days and 65 votes, the results are as follows:

  • The older man with the car: (28 votes)
  • Rosie and Jane, the two girls (18 votes)
  • Steve, the boy upstairs (15 votes)
  • Ty, the shy obsessed boy (12 votes)
  • Rob, the drunk horny lad in the kitchen (12 votes)
  • Tom, the brash athletic guy (8 votes)
So the man with the car is the clear winner, albeit with a decent interest for the other stories (although Tom is not much loved. Fuck you, Tom).

This is purely advisory and I'll still mostly work on chapters that interest me, but I will probably indeed "complete" the interactions with the older man soonish, leaving open for a later date the path where she runs from the car and the one where she tries to find her own way into her house.
 
People really like the older man, or maybe people just really like having Clara leave the party early for some reason? I must say though I didn't vote for it, the option where Clara ends up trying to get home herself in an unknown area, certainly is intriguing.

Also I did not somehow know there were characters named Rosie and Jane in the story till I saw the poll. I must find this now. There is a potential rapist in this story with my name! Hell yeah!
 
TheLeherengin said:
People really like the older man, or maybe people just really like having Clara leave the party early for some reason? I must say though I didn't vote for it, the option where Clara ends up trying to get home herself in an unknown area, certainly is intriguing.

Also I did not somehow know there were characters named Rosie and Jane in the story till I saw the poll. I must find this now. There is a potential rapist in this story with my name! Hell yeah!
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It's still in need of development but Clara runs into them if she turns Ty down at a certain point and he molests her in the hallway. She can then go with them back to the Sofa Of Bad Life Choices and erotic fiction ensues.
 
Just to prove I'm not dead, published some new chapters (finally).

In which our protagonist is very conflicted about having become an impromptu prostitute and our antagonist is a sick controlling bastard that readers like to see for some reason.
 
The lesbian option is not deeply developed and requires you to first hang out with a skinny boy before backing off at a specific moment.

It's a very well laid-out story, honest.
 
The published lesbian chapters number about three right now. I had planned more but they were a bit harder to write since I have no direct experience with lesbian sex.

Like, I'm a pervert but I'm a pervert with standards ok.
 
Yeah I like it as a nod to my own personal ethics, a porn format, and also functions as a way to do an AMA via character.
 
Hello, I'm writing again because I like when the Fave and Bookmark and Like notifications go off. Tryna just write towards some sort of ending from popular branches, rather than endlessly branch. Current project is Clara's many conquests by Tom.
 
This is a good story and I like the various places you've taken it. My personal favorite is the schoolgirl roleplaying storyline, but I haven't run down all the branches yet. This line in particular is a standout:

"Clara thinks, still trying to guess exactly where this is going. She feels like she's been put in a play and given no script. And if she says her lines wrong she might find herself bent over that desk, skirt pushed up and-"

I really like the turn here that she's being forced to play a "character" but she has no idea what responses are the "right" ones. That's a really hot scene setup. I think a branch where things go wrong would be a great addition.

If I had one suggestion, I'd say some changes to the chapter titles or labeling would be helpful. Most of them are entitled "She [does X]" so it's not clear what is happening in each branch from story view. But that's a minor quibble.
 
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