A Special Hell

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by brevdravis, Aug 2, 2018.

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What would you like to see when the main path is finished?

Poll closed Sep 11, 2018.
  1. More Alternate Sex Scenes.

    1 vote(s)
    10.0%
  2. Supernatural Elements introduced.

    4 vote(s)
    40.0%
  3. Alternate Endings/More Gamefication of the Story

    4 vote(s)
    40.0%
  4. More Male Characters

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  5. More Female Characters

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  6. Brenda Path (Female MC. Will involve a lot of Copypasta, and adjustment.)

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  7. More Sexting.

    1 vote(s)
    10.0%
  8. Random Control Poll Choice: Incest. (I dunno, I write in Brent's Kid sister or something...)

    4 vote(s)
    40.0%
  9. No idea, Surprise me! I prefer the tension!

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
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  1. chris_brown

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    Mind providing a link to the most recent poll? ;)
     
  2. brevdravis

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    DOH! Here's the link, and plenty of time left, folks! I'm just going to be adding to the teasers until folks make a choice!
     
    Last edited: Sep 14, 2019
  3. brevdravis

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    Surprising no one, Twincest won the poll and will be the next ending worked on.

    I'm sensing a trend.
     
  4. This is probably my favorite story on chyoa for the realism, so thank you very much!

    If you're still fishing for ideas for endings, maybe you could entertain this one: Kaila + Charlotte, femdomme. The original idea bouncing around was Kaila strongly showing her agency around Brent and Imogene, especially with Charlotte there to add fuel to the fire, although it could be Charlotte or Kaila + Charlotte that end up "bossy"?

    But please, Kaila, as befits a queen. :)

    Meanwhile Helen's back at the cabin, finding zen in archery.

    Thanks again!
     
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  5. brevdravis

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    Actually, not a path I'd mind writing. Let me mull on it a bit. Some folks have always felt this story was a bit Femdommy, so might be fun to show what I think Femdomme actually means. :)

    Not saying no... But a definite MAYBE.
     
  6. It was something that came together all at once in my head after some rereading of the main body, the current ending you're working on, and seeing Kaila's actions blow up in her face. What if Kaila got an ending where she "got" what she wanted in an aggressive manner, similar to the notes for the solo Brent ending?

    Regardless of whatever you choose in the end, thanks for hearing me out!
     
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  7. brevdravis

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    No worries. Least I can do if people take the time to write me is read it. :)

    And I do like how you're going with that. That way we get both a Mdom and an Msub route for folks. You MAY have convinced me on this. Regardless, I promise to put on the next poll.
     
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  8. brevdravis

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    Per Numerous Requests, I'm rewriting a small portion of the story that was done by my co-author Your Ghostwriter.
    Nothing against their work, but it no longer feels quite in character for Charlotte, so as a result, it's being resigned to the "Alternate" path.
    I LOVE these scenes, don't get me wrong, but they don't feel right for the story. I'm not dumping them, just for my first "Linear" path, the pictures feel like a distraction, and they need to go.
     
  9. brevdravis

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    So, just for the hell of it, added a trailer to the 1st chapter of the story. If you always wanted a synopsis, and were sick of me not writing one... well this isn't it. Instead it's the most Hollywood, misleading trailer I can create, and it uses scenes exclusively from the story. Absolutely zero help in understanding the story, but surprisingly fun to do.
     
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  10. chris_brown

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    so in other words,its like the Firefly Funhouse match from Wrestlemania last night ;) lol
     
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  11. brevdravis

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    Didn't see it, but why not! Even added a wrestlemania/tony stark over the top entrance this morning that only makes sense in context.
     
  12. chris_brown

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    Look up the highlights (and I use that term VERY loosely here) of the match on YouTube and you’ll see why I say that lol
     
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  13. brevdravis

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    Yeah, basically... hell with it, I'm just... going to do this completely batshit because I can, and I always wanted to, and... hell with it, nothing ELSE to do today.
     
  14. brevdravis

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    And one more Trailer. This time as an R-Rated Comedy.
    This one was a LOT of fun to write.
     
  15. brevdravis

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    ASH is now compatible with short attention spans
    All 28 Sex scenes are accessible from the first chapter now, Just click on the "Skip to a Sex Scene !" choice.

    Because I know not everybody wants to read my pretentious parts... but everybody seems to like my sex scenes.

    What can I say, I'm not proud.



    Edit: Oops. 29, I forgot one.
     
    Last edited: Apr 29, 2020
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  16. brevdravis

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    OK, So... Added a complete Short Novel to ASH as a thank you to all my readers.
    Totally different, so I put into Eris' Poetry Corner... which I should and will rename.
    Just a little story about a girl who goes to a convention in drag... and ends up scoring with the hottest girl at the con. :p
    Because... you know... THANK YOU for all the support, and you guys deserve more.

    2 new sex scenes... one of them a creampie, the other a woman on woman.... Enjoy, linked on the first chapter if you don't want to read the 20 chapters to get to them... and I don't blame you... because it's just dorky conversation about games and a gal complaining a lot about gamers. :p
     
  17. brevdravis

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    OK... there's a lot of demand for my two new characters, Kelly and Sandy...
    Apparently folks do like them... so going to try to bring them into the story.
    Going to finish up this discordian ending, which is a couple more weeks, tops, then see what I can do to bring these two into the apartment complex where Brent and Viola from NND live.
    For those who didn't read it,
    Sandy's a gamer girl who has a bit of a temper, and does Shakespearean style drag for Shakespearean style reasons.
    Kelly is an Ethical Slut. A mega-ethical slut. But very fun, very easy... but really hard to shake off if she wants you.

    Hey, what can I say... they two of them stem from my love of plays like "As you Like It" and "Twelfth Night".
    So... Still trying to figure out some ideas for them. As of right now, I have a big ZILCH, so... if you ever wanted input into ASH... good time to chime in.

     
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  18. brevdravis

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    OK, Discordian ending done... and it's a joke, but Im adding in the sex scenes based off the various endings as a THANK you for sticking with it.
    That's Right! Nothing But Gratuitous Sex Scenes on ASH until I make up for EVERY ONE of those AWFUL cheap endings.
    Because It's not like I wrote a bunch of bad endings just so I could write a bunch of Sex scenes and show everybody I don't even take my best work seriously...
     
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  19. brevdravis

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    Well... this sucks. Just checked the news, and apparently the way I describe Brent is the new face of terrorism in the United States.
    Not kidding, apparently my fondness for Hawaiian shirts means that I'm a terrorist now. Somebody has gotta break the news to Weird Al...

    This has GOT to feel exactly how the writers of Archer felt when ISIS showed up.
    Fuck it... I ain't changing it, but... Wow... Talk about your BAD luck...