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Thinking of writing a new story, moving away from Jessica I think, it starts as the below ish.... Couple of things to consider.
The story will revolve around Sarah, trading, death, revenge in an apocalyptic world
I don’t think there is enough urgency in the text and I’m wondering how I can try to quicken the pace of the reader, does anyone find a particular font changing the way they read a chapter?
In the middle of nowhere situated on mash land, a small group of people built a community in the aftermath of what is now known of as the beginning.
Centuries ago the polar ice caps melted, the world became much smaller as cities were cut off from the mainland, country’s were lost to the sea. The weather changed dramatically brining with it thunderous storms that would last for days and winters that could last for years.
Riots and mass hysteria erupted, their was a massive loss of life before government leaders worked together, creating a new centralised government and the world adapted to the new way of life, but it was a difficult world to live in, so much technology was lost, so many people were lost, rising food prices surpassed any inflation and meat became sparsely available.
Human evolution hadn’t began to adapt to the harsh new environments or shortage of food creating more and more anger.
After years and years of gradually losing land and the changes in the economical climate small groups of self governed communities grew larger in numbers until a world coup was staged, the central government was overthrown, massive wars broke out all around the world and the world that we know was lost.
---The world today---
“The waters rose, the land became wet and the stars were so close you could almost touch them if you reached out enough.”, “Now go to sleep darling”
“Again again, please tell me it again daddy?”, “Please....jut once more”
“Hahaokay.... They never predicted they would melt as fast as they did. The world became a marsh land in only a matter of months, cities, big huge cities like Tokyo, London! And whole countries were engulfed by the tides and lost overnight. Over the centuries we lost more and more parts of the world, cities cut off from one another, land masses becoming further away.”
“But then you and mum met and had me and”
“Hey, haha, I’m telling the story”, “Sarah,Sarah,Sarah!”
“Hu?” Sarah woke, her heart beating like a drum as she lifted her head from the cold table surface and bolted for the door.
In the distance she could see smoke, hear the beating of drums and the roaring sound of flames roaring into the sky.
“Oh fuck, get the blockades up!” she shouted to her left as she jumped down from the porch, the squelching sounds of her feet quickening as she ran as quickly as possible out over a field.
Sliding on her knees, she began pulling with all her might on a metal chain, the resounding clicking noise around her echoed for miles as walls began to appear upright, surrounding the complex.
Or does this only sound interesting in my head?
The story will revolve around Sarah, trading, death, revenge in an apocalyptic world
I don’t think there is enough urgency in the text and I’m wondering how I can try to quicken the pace of the reader, does anyone find a particular font changing the way they read a chapter?
In the middle of nowhere situated on mash land, a small group of people built a community in the aftermath of what is now known of as the beginning.
Centuries ago the polar ice caps melted, the world became much smaller as cities were cut off from the mainland, country’s were lost to the sea. The weather changed dramatically brining with it thunderous storms that would last for days and winters that could last for years.
Riots and mass hysteria erupted, their was a massive loss of life before government leaders worked together, creating a new centralised government and the world adapted to the new way of life, but it was a difficult world to live in, so much technology was lost, so many people were lost, rising food prices surpassed any inflation and meat became sparsely available.
Human evolution hadn’t began to adapt to the harsh new environments or shortage of food creating more and more anger.
After years and years of gradually losing land and the changes in the economical climate small groups of self governed communities grew larger in numbers until a world coup was staged, the central government was overthrown, massive wars broke out all around the world and the world that we know was lost.
---The world today---
“The waters rose, the land became wet and the stars were so close you could almost touch them if you reached out enough.”, “Now go to sleep darling”
“Again again, please tell me it again daddy?”, “Please....jut once more”
“Hahaokay.... They never predicted they would melt as fast as they did. The world became a marsh land in only a matter of months, cities, big huge cities like Tokyo, London! And whole countries were engulfed by the tides and lost overnight. Over the centuries we lost more and more parts of the world, cities cut off from one another, land masses becoming further away.”
“But then you and mum met and had me and”
“Hey, haha, I’m telling the story”, “Sarah,Sarah,Sarah!”
“Hu?” Sarah woke, her heart beating like a drum as she lifted her head from the cold table surface and bolted for the door.
In the distance she could see smoke, hear the beating of drums and the roaring sound of flames roaring into the sky.
“Oh fuck, get the blockades up!” she shouted to her left as she jumped down from the porch, the squelching sounds of her feet quickening as she ran as quickly as possible out over a field.
Sliding on her knees, she began pulling with all her might on a metal chain, the resounding clicking noise around her echoed for miles as walls began to appear upright, surrounding the complex.
Or does this only sound interesting in my head?
