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Farmer's DaughterCan you score with the farmer's daughter, without getting caught?
I am just a fan instead of the author.
BONUS TIME! Breakfast at Connie's
The second HyperLink is my favorite thread of this story's weave.
The point of this post is that I had a thought of writing a thread or two of them getting to the protagonist's reunion with Connie, Keiko, Loretta, and Val; Instead of the existing foray into an incestuous reunion that has him leaving the farm girls behind... well Keiko might not be a farm girl but...
However, there are two options. The first option is without Val joining them. Therefore, my thought is to suggest the author edit in Val joining them just in a different way obviously.
The second thread has Val seduce him at the Garage. Yet the girls mention blabbing about it to their childhood best friend, and Val was agreeable to follow them with him into the city. {ultimately} Therefore, it already seems consistent for say Val to have a friend take the back roads and get to her to the rest stop ahead of the protagonist and wait for him.
Maybe have the recent asian Amee from the poker/truth/dare games be the one driving Val. Having her join would help stress the differences between Amee and Keiko and define their characters more than simply cloistered asian girls... Not that is necessarily a bad thing...
It seems that link/jumping threads to other parts of the story is half way in? I mean it seems maybe authors have the ability to link one thread as the child of another already existing thread.
The previous suggestions is the reasoning for my final suggetion that the author link the Rest Stop threads as a child of the end this thread here.
Thank you for sharing your Force; And may you eternally ask the Goddess to light your path.