Vanessa Von Sex
Virgin
Hey everybody,
For some reason my new story is displayed (at least for me) as if it only has one chapter. However, it's quite larger, with Part 1 being almost 10k words.
I was kinda hoping to get some feedback for part two, so anything would be really helpful.
Here's the story's logline:
As a way of celebrating school finally finished, you decide to take a trip to an old lakehouse. You never imagined this would involve threesomes, cheating and brand new sexual experiences.
The link:
https://chyoa.com/story/Big-Pleasure-in-Little-Heaven.20740
Contributions welcome!
I also encourage you to read my first finished story, "Fucking Lena". I tried to use a similar concept but improve it as much as possible (mainly by having characters that were a bit more complex). I hope it shows.
Thanks to everyone who replied to my last forum post! Very helpful feedback. And thanks for reading my new story.
V
For some reason my new story is displayed (at least for me) as if it only has one chapter. However, it's quite larger, with Part 1 being almost 10k words.
I was kinda hoping to get some feedback for part two, so anything would be really helpful.
Here's the story's logline:
As a way of celebrating school finally finished, you decide to take a trip to an old lakehouse. You never imagined this would involve threesomes, cheating and brand new sexual experiences.
The link:
https://chyoa.com/story/Big-Pleasure-in-Little-Heaven.20740
Contributions welcome!
I also encourage you to read my first finished story, "Fucking Lena". I tried to use a similar concept but improve it as much as possible (mainly by having characters that were a bit more complex). I hope it shows.
Thanks to everyone who replied to my last forum post! Very helpful feedback. And thanks for reading my new story.
V
