Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

Discussion in 'Story Feedback' started by Gambio, Jan 24, 2021.

  1. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Hah thanks. I'm always a bit worried when I bust out Rina and Ben for the incest stories lol
     
  2. TheLeherengin

    TheLeherengin Really Really Experienced

    I mean I will say... I do not like Rina. It's like the one thing Unknown was right about. Rina as a character sucks... But I don't know if that's intentional or not. The reviews though are still fun.
     
  3. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Rina is...complicated

    One has to read Generic body control story to really understand what I intended to do with her. But that would be cruel and unusual punishment.

    I can say though that Rina is the most evil protagonist I ever written.
     
  4. CurvyLinesEverywhere

    CurvyLinesEverywhere Really Experienced

    Can confirm. She's more a better-disguised Pearl Forrester than a Mike Nelson.
     
    AlexandraS90 likes this.
  5. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

  6. CurvyLinesEverywhere

    CurvyLinesEverywhere Really Experienced

    Pffft. You call that a grail? It barely aged me five, ten years, tops.

    I think we can do better, as a community of terrible writers.
     
  7. Zeebop

    Zeebop CHYOA Guru

    I don't think LLNO has even made Marcie or Gina breathe heavy.
     
  8. TheLeherengin

    TheLeherengin Really Really Experienced

    Damn... Well now I don't know what to live for...

    (I am of course kidding)
     
  9. CurvyLinesEverywhere

    CurvyLinesEverywhere Really Experienced

    Seriously. We have all the tools we need in order to not only arouse them both in the same story, but possibly even in the same scene.
     
  10. TheLeherengin

    TheLeherengin Really Really Experienced

    I mean serious props to this story... It got me to masturbate reading it as well... So that's a thing...

    That might have been TMI I dunno... But I will say only like three stories on this entire site actually got me hot like that, so... Props.
     
    Last edited: Jun 15, 2022
  11. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    The very first segment did actually suceed in making Gina a bit hot and bothered. But that was back when Gina was still sweet and innocent(and also sexually frustrated by Marcie)

    As a heads up, catering to them will usually have the exact opposite effect.


    It's a pretty big accomplishment!

    I probably can't even share the depraved shit that gets me off. At least Marcie and Gina have more normal taste.
     
  12. CurvyLinesEverywhere

    CurvyLinesEverywhere Really Experienced

    Gee, if only somebody knew how to spring it on them like some sort of... how did Gina put it? Ah, yes...

    Oh, you mean like your well-established taste for... (checks Gambio's history; suddenly realizes Gambio has liked every chapter they've ever read) ...security-through-obscurity? Fuck me...
     
  13. RejectTed

    RejectTed Really Experienced

    I could use another asshole right now, so I'm going to throw Lustful Valhalla to the ladies. Hopefully they won't mind ripping me a new one.
     
    Gambio likes this.
  14. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru


    Well, based on the tags, this seems to be right up Marcie and Gina's alley,...meaning they will be doubly pissed if it turns out to be a letdown ;P

    Put ya on the backlog
     
    RejectTed likes this.
  15. JohnTitor45

    JohnTitor45 Experienced

    Well, there goes Operation Shark Maid Cafe.
     
  16. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

  17. JakeSnakeCakes

    JakeSnakeCakes Experienced

    Gonna start this war. Avatar isn't an anime (derogatory). It's a cartoon (derogatory).
     
    JohnTitor45 and AlexandraS90 like this.
  18. JohnTitor45

    JohnTitor45 Experienced

    I think she is referring to the anime style and how people say it might as well be an anime.
     
  19. JakeSnakeCakes

    JakeSnakeCakes Experienced

    Which is silly imo. Either everything is an anime, because anime just means animation (which is too broad for anime fans), or only Japanese animations are anime (which includes animations that have a Western style).
     
  20. Gambio

    Gambio CHYOA Guru

    Just for the reccord, Marcie does agree with you, but Gina was too horny for blue aliens to let her finish her explanation.
     
    JakeSnakeCakes likes this.