Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

Gambio said:
God damnit, Zeebop, we release on the same day again XD

https://chyoa.com/chapter/Halloween-Hijynx,-by-vyksin.1584039
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Thanks so much for taking the time to do this; it was fun! The critiques are definitely valid. I made the conscious decision to minimize review over content as I kept stalling on it in the past. I keep telling myself I'll go back and clean it up, but I've been plugging forward.

Gina should really look at the Hot Stuff I collated for people not wanting the slow burn. ;) They could have pushed on to 46 for some fun anal, 51 for hotel euphoria, but I figured the duo might like 78 more. :p

Thank you again for the creative critique!
-Vyksin (and no, I don't spell it right ;) )
 
I truly mean no offense when I say, I'm pretty sure it is very much not my sort of thing. I've honestly held off because I'm not sure I could give it a fair reading.
 
Sorry again, could have sworn there was more you hadn't covered , Still you did what was there with style. Also glad to see you think my writing has gotten better, or at least Gina does ;) That was my first story after all.
 
That's good to hear. No, seriously I do think there is a substantial improvement if we compare the two stories., so you're definitely on the right track
 
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