Marcie and Gina read CHYOA

XD you know I did say once we were done with Iralia, I'd put Tower back up for review since it's been about... What two three floors since their last review and probably at least almost a year?
 
Thanks for covering my basic-ass story. ;) I'm surprised how relatively gentle Marcie and Gina were with it. Most of their issues with it were actually pretty fair.
Unoriginal premise and kinks - check.
Not trusting the reader to get the jokes - yeah, a little.
The girls getting a bit more generic once they are mind-controlled - kind of. Maybe that's a bit difficult to avoid with mind control.
Sneaking incest into the seemingly non-incest branch of the story - I feel kind of bad about that.
Indulgently self-aware lampshade hanging - True, and how!
“This story is very self aware. This is not the first time it basically hits you over the head with how problematic certain aspects of its writings are. And normally I would say that is a good thing.”

“But lemme guess, it for some reason isn’t!”

“I think you can be too blatant about it. I do not think Leah’s race needed to be brought up at all. At least not in this context. It comes across as a tad, je ne sais quoi, self indulgent, like the author is self-fellating.”
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If I were able to do that, I might spend a lot less time writing.

What I will not stand for is my username being referred to as "boomer"! 1965 is the start of Gen X.

Seriously, I very much enjoyed the review.
 
@MisterMan1965

Glad you enjoyed it!

There was genuinely very little to complain with this one. It unfortunately happened to be of a subject matter both girls strongly dislike. If I knew incest was that prevalent I would have send out my incest characters to cover it lol

Also don't worry, Gina is in her early twenties, she calls everyone above thirty a Boomer

TheLeherengin said:
XD you know I did say once we were done with Iralia, I'd put Tower back up for review since it's been about... What two three floors since their last review and probably at least almost a year?
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Sure, I slot you in. We have quite a lot of new voices for them to dunk on after all
 
I think it's one or two of Leherengin's latest efforts. I've just been waiting until I finish writing all the endings for this column on the spreadsheet (10 left, at this time of writing) before tackling one.
 
Let's get a backlog going.
It doesn't have any kinky gladiattixes in it, but can Gina and Marcie go over Cozy and KInky?
Next story I get them to look at will be the one with the sexy pirate I promise. I just have to publish a few more chapters in it.
 
RejectTed said:
Let's get a backlog going.
It doesn't have any kinky gladiattixes in it, but can Gina and Marcie go over Cozy and KInky?
Next story I get them to look at will be the one with the sexy pirate I promise. I just have to publish a few more chapters in it.
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XD, this will definitely upset Gina in more ways then one.

Added it to the backlog
 
Gambio said:
Based on the synopsis alone, you better prepare yourself for the worst XD

Added to the backlog
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Oh I'm totally sure I'm gonna get annhilated. But I've enjoyed reading a number of the reviews and I'm curious enough to see what other's think that I'll take the beating gladly.
 
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